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Insecurity♥

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I've been impatiently waiting;

Clenching old "love" notes begging you to let me go
I'm still diligently hesitating
...my eyes show everything you need to know

You can break me down
But you'll never see my tainted tears
That bargain for you to stay
Instead of pointing out my flaws
Why don't you realize you're still standing here
...you haven't yet walked away

I won't let you grasp the broken pieces of my heart
I really need you to go
...I need you to leave before I critically fall apart
can't let you take whatever's left of me
The girl I've come to be;
Insecurity.

I get my hopes up unknowingly;
Getting let down really isn't anything new
How can you say that you know me
...when you don't know what I'm going through

You can push me down
But I'll never let you see my degrading tears
That beg for you to walk away
Instead of shoving shame in my face
Realize you're still the one standing here
...you're the one who chose to stay

I want to shed these tears & cry
To emotionally set everything free
But no matter how hard I try
I go back to the same dillusional situation:
typical you & me.

This is the girl I've come to be;
Insecurity.

Author notes

Prompt 3: pic

Credit: Fake tears. by ~InsideMe

Prompt 4: anything on tears

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  • OHMYGAWDDD

    How the hell can you write this way!!! With so much emotion and pain .. ilovethissomuch...and the picture you have with this is amazing.

    * You can break me down
    But you'll never see my tainted tears*

    Perfect. Absolutely captivating and speak nothing but the truth.

    * I get my hopes up unknowingly;
    Getting let down really isn't anything new
    How can you say that you know me
    ...when you don't know what I'm going through*

    Some of the best lines I've ever read, EVERR. Specifically the last two in that verse. So true. Do you know how many guys I'd love to ask that? Or just people in general? Well wait -- nvm, you actually do! Haha

    Stunning<333

  • This was a powerful piece of emotion. The way you worded how you felt was extremely packed with sorrow yet lightly toned with hope. I liked reading it and you've captured my heart with your magical words.

  • Well done, this poem speaks to me, love it! @
  • Wow I loved this!! It held my attention and I could definitely connect. You do a great job with the whole dirty pretty thing. It makes the poem stand out even more and you can kind of fell the emotion you're giving out...gret job and congrats on the win
  • wow I'm amaze on this piece..it's just full of emotions came out of the screen the pain is tremendous!!!it's hard to put forth of everything when you know it can't be return but the hurt & pain..pushing yourself forward and won't back down no matter what throws in your path..insecurity but it can't be shown..

    Love your poems as always!!!
    Lieu


  • ERbby silver member
    July 7
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    great use of words doll
    loved the flow and erg your simply great at this all to well!i see why you have the bronze though i thought gold fit it more but its all good great work love much,

    pflw

  • ERbby silver member
    July 7

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    great use of words doll
    loved the flow and erg your simply great at this all to well!i see why you have the bronze though i thought gold fit it more but its all good great work love much,

    pflw
  • wow i really loved the flow... and all youve said here..... thanks for sharing this and entering good luck in this contest.....!
  • very nice picture and great flow. I love these lines:
    How can you say that you know me
    ...when you don't know what I'm going through

    brilliant, i feel a lot of people can relate to those lines and yet it feels as if they are just for me. vaery nice. I love your choice of words, this is excellent

  • omfg this was like really good
    like REALLY good haha nice work hunny

  • oh i love your poem... so sad
    "I get my hopes up unknowingly;
    Getting let down really isn't anything new
    How can you say that you know me
    ...when you don't know what I'm going through"
    i really loved those lines, best of luck in the contest.
    xxx he broke me

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