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Desire~

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Desire~
light fragrance against my skin
the wrapping of linen
snug about the hips


Breathing in deeper


I hear the whisper
of his intent to keep her
then desire fills the soul


her look was empty
until she felt his touch
then her eyes danced with emerald passion
while his lips pretend
to memorize each crease


Never again would they speak
of the desire
that would bloom that first fall
and continue to haunt well past many more


Oh but of desire
during the first fall

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  • azlyn gold member
    August 24

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    This is romantic and haunting! I love the feel of this write. Sensually tantalizing!


    Az

  • azlyn gold member
    August 24
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    This is romantic and haunting! I love the feel of this write. Sensually tantalizing!


    Az


  • Blue Rew silver member
    August 1

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    This is enchanting in its brevity...
    leaving the warm feelings lingering.
    You are a charmer when you turn to the sensual side.
    Blue


    • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
      August 2
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      Dear Blue~

      Thank you so very much my dear, your thoughts are so wonderful for me to read..smiles
      Many blessings to you~
      ~A~
      aka the charmer..lol

  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 31

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    Well Done Sis,

    I always like the way I seem to enjoy your pieces so much, that I usually reread twice before placing a comment upon your page. Very captivating are your works. Shine on, and try not to fall anymore. Make sure He catches ya.

    -Bro Timothy


    • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
      August 2
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      Tim~

      You always leave me with such wonderful comments and make me smile...
      Many blessings to you and yours...
      Sister ~A~

  • Antonio Valentino
    July 30

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    Simply beautiful dear poet.
    Really enjoying your writing.
    Left me wanting for more.

    Antonio


  • Endeavor gold member
    July 26

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    Excellent

    Never again would they speak
    of the desire
    that would bloom that first fall
    and continue to haunt well past many more


    Oh but of desire
    during the first fall

    Simply beautiful

    Rick


    • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
      July 27
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      Rick~

      She smiles, thank you so very much for this lovely comment...so nice to see you here again~
      Many blessings
      ~A~

  • mysticstorm gold member
    July 21

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    How beautiful...so very soft and creative...the flow is magical and the passion is pure desire...the imagery is wonderful and the sensual feel is so ellegant and graceful...wonderful work, so full of life and love...
    Best,
    :


    • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
      August 5
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      mysticstorm~

      My dear,forgive me for overlooking your comment...smiles
      Many blessings to you and thank you so very much for adding such beauty to my page...
      ~A~

  • Robin Candor
    July 8

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    You are thge only writer I read who is not jaded like myself. You still can take on the romance of life and make it believable. Oh to have such a spirit as you possess! You can look at something, hear something and turn it into your own painting that has a life of its own. The life you breath into it and it is yours and yours alone even though inspired from something else. Don't ever lose that if you can avoid it. RC


    • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
      July 8
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      RC~

      I use to think that I was one of those without a gift, I never understood people who knew what they wanted from life...never understood it.
      I do now...smiles...and now that I know what it is and how to use it...I fully intend to keep it...smiles
      Thank you for your wonderful comment...
      Many blessings to you and yours...
      ~A~

  • JohnnyD gold member
    July 8

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    flows like a song from one's soul.....

    not that you love music is it?

    But yes, very lovely and the pic is superb!

    VERY well done!!


  • LivinitupCutie
    July 7

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    Such a heart warming piece this is..filled with love and passion..a love that's never cease no matter what's the obstacle is in its way...beautifully done!!!


    Keep penning!!!
    Lieu


    • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
      July 7
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      Lieu

      Thank you for such a lovely comment...I adore this ...smiles
      Many blessings
      ~A~

  • tomisb gold member
    July 7

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    What fascinates me it the shift after "I hear the whisper" from the first person to the third person. I keep hearing echos of you in this poem. Now if it was just a slip of improper parsing so be it. But hear it almost as if you were the progeny of this fire that burneth not the soul but scorches the heart and sears the seal of commitment. Beautifully sensual and deeply full of energy that speaks to the soul and the being that makes a couple forever.
    Love,
    Tom Burson.


    • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
      July 7
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      Sir Tomis

      No, I intended to be the third party in this.
      As you know, I never give all of myself away in a piece...I rather think of myself as the Cameo shot in some masterpiece..smiles...lol
      Ok and a bit full of it on top of it all...
      Thank you for reading me and for your wonderful comments...I always look forward to your thoughts...
      Blessings
      ~A~

  • Rhyming From Rehab gold member
    July 7

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    WOW...wipes sweat from brow...very lovely sissy...beautiful love it!


    • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
      July 7
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      Rhyming~

      Thank you my dear sister for this beautiful comment...Im so very pleased that I could at last make you blush..lol
      Many blessings
      ~A~
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