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Her Violin

Her violin is always under her chin
causing me very much chagrin
The reason is you know
there's no fun in kissing a bow

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  • Vera Rich gold member
    July 26

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    "If you would kiss your dear sweetheart, Oh
    Just tell her to play pizzicato!"

    Sorry, this entry is a witty idea, but to my ear the rhythm needs a little more work. And as I said in the rules, very brief poems do not really work well in live shows unless they are of spectacular quality.

    But please do not remove it from the competition. I shall be returning to it later before making my final judging.


  • Lj-
    July 21
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    Cute.

    Thank you for your entry,
    Best of luck.