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black clouds

black clouds
shroud moon and stars
owl prowls

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  • Jillybean128
    July 19

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    You have done an amazing job with this one. I can really feel this environment...Good luck to you in the contest

    ~*~Jillybean128

  • DogFish silver member
    July 13

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    You really know how to pare your poety down to the essentials! Just the bare bones of a few words but the portrait is complete!


  • azure85 gold member
    July 8

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    black clouds
    shroud moon and stars
    owl prowls

    Very good haiku about the scenes of the night. You have good images and you can almost see the glow of the owl's eyes. Thank you so much.


  • Emerald13
    July 8

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    i like the imagery ... would prefer the articles required for clear language were utilised as in 'the moon' and 'an owl prowls' ... although i dont know that owls prowl ? ..

    you know just to mention the owl in relation to the black clouds shrouding the moon and stars prompt us to 'know' its hunting coz it can see in the dark ? ...

    if the word alone is too short a named type of owl would settle that problem ..

    enjoyed thinking on this one ... please ignore if this is of no help to you >>> Gina

  • myron silver member
    July 7

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    clear

    This poem uses images in a clear and vivid way. There is a good, clean break at the end of the second line. Under cover of the darkness the owl goes hunting.

    Best wishes in the contest,
    Myron.
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