A .:♥:skeptical:♥:. scheme
Annihilating each &.& every o-n-e of my [boundaries]
...suffocating//[me♥]
You N.E.V.E.R gave a {::damn::}
(Never.again) do I want to feel your hand moving
U
P
&.:.&
D
O
W
N
my [.[backk].]
F a l l i n g / / A - p - a - r - t
♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
I've n/e/v/e/r walked away...
I've stood here by your ~side~
I gave you .a.l.l. I had to give
& it's too late to start o v e r;;
now---
I feel it's gone too far
I'm in ^over^ my head [[again]]
I guess it never was enough
& it's too late to start o/v/e/r
...too late to start o v e r [now]
♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
I've .::learned::. to l e a v e ;;
Before I'm the [o/n/e] who is
l
e
f
t
You lied straight to my -f-a-c-e-
(Never.again) Will I crave your
d e a d l y // ...yet gorgeous
e`y`e`s
B R E A K I N G / / my ♥H ♥ E ♥ A ♥ R ♥ T♥
...& it's too late to start o/v/e/r
...too late to start o v e r---♥
Author notes
Dirty Pretty ♥
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A contest entry
- Dirty Pretty ♥ by Page Deleted..
425 points, ended July 11, 2008, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - DirtyPretty - Prewrites or Fresh by xxRainbowDawnxx.
450 points, ended July 30, 2008, 52 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Many Options for Gifted Poets by Carpe Noctem.
525 points, ended October 24, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Don't Mind Me [[I'm Only Dying]] --- Dirty Pretty Contest by EvenStarsBreak--x.
600 points, ended October 26, 2008, 67 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - DIRTY PRETTY-PW allowed by Heva Feva.
400 points, ended July 3, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
pleassse tell me what you think :]
Comments
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Ok, I love your dp! It's a great story line and I really like the repetition. Finalist! Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.
-heva -
hey; thanks for the entry; don't get me wrong, it's the best one i've read in the whole contest, BUT you're one of my favourites so i can't count this entry because it's a prewrite.
but again, this is definatly the best one i've ever read in this contest!=] -
Amazing! The emotion is stunning and it's very nicely written as well. =] Thank you for the entry and good luck.
x-Pretty-Odd-x <3 -
An all too familiar story, and a nice dirty pretty at that. Very emotional and I liked the repetitive bits...they seemed to add to the strength of the emotion conveyed. Thanks a lot for entering, and best of luck!
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It sucks when a relationship gets to this point. Unfortunately, this happens all too often.
This was a great example of dirty pretty and your emotions were delivered very well.
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love this part: i've learned to leave, before I'm the one who is left"
--I like the background, very much---
the idea of the poem too, it caught me...
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indeed, stick tow hat I said
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ohh i meant to say i loved the background, too.
make me another one?! :]]
<33 -
Oooh
You write dirty pretty now, huh? Who fawking knew??
Yet another ahhmazing write by my best friend.
*I've learned to leave ;;
Before I'm the one who is left*
Favvvs. Most definitely. Woww. You said it all right there in those 2 simple lines hoealicious. We've been left, thus we now know how to leave, also. There's always an exit, right? We just have to decide whether we're RUNNING to the escape route or WALKING onto a better road that can put the past behind us.
hmm .. something to think about .. your poems are always an eye-opener and I'm sure I somehow respond to them differently than most people, lol
<3333
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Awee this is so beautiful and I love the background.
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Wow.
I never knew that that was dirty pretty. Thats freaking awesome. I don't think I can do that though Because i don't think I can do the bold and stuff though becasue I lost my silver membership.
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It's okay if you can't do the bold/italics stuff You can still make dirty pretty with punctuation and other things like that. haha Thanks for the comment love♥
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Love the poem and background but.......
I still don't understand this 'dirty pretty' style -
Don't have the time to read right now. I do like the background a lot, though!
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This is a fantastic piece of writing ♥
The only issue I had was with the part:
P.
U.
&.:.&
D.
O.
W.
N.
At first I was like, PU? Huh?
But nevertheless, fantastic.
♥ Finalist ♥
Keira
-- blackwood.baby -
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Thankks doll=)
I changed it. haha ♥
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Awww this is beautifully wrote, so heart wrenching and I really can relate to this one sweetie, as I've been there. Deceived, taunted, lied to, think I've only been used for sex... It's a craving to have someone, but I know how it feels to just need to get away, sometimes it shows strength walking away, instead of putting up with their crap.
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Great structure I love it immensely..turning your back on the one you want..leaving of what's left there..too little too late..
Keep Penning!!!
Lieu
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love the color lol
it add's something to it i think
but the poem its self was good as well,
i must say this was abit much for me
mainly for i am more the basic dp type but dont get me wrong soll this was great i wish you nothing but the best in the contest keep at it, love much
pflw -
wow gr8 job i love it it would make good lyrics too maby lol. nice work.well done.
siera.
♥
xx
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