Everyone can see them...
One right after the other...
Perfectly aligned on my arms and wrists...
Straight...Deep...Painful cuts...
Reminding myself that I exist...
And how much I wish i didn't...
The razor so sharp and tempting...
Yet forever stained with my blood..
Wincing as I move the blade...
From one edge of my wrist to the other..
Bleeding a stream of black blood...
Releasing my inner anguish...
Replacing my old pain...with new pain...
Adding to my already large collection...
I lay there empty after...
On blood stained sheets....
And a tear drenched pillow...
Hoping my pain will vanish...
Hoping these wounds will heal..
Hoping I...won't wake up...
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A contest entry
- Emotion of Darkness by Strawberry Wolf.
450 points, ended July 21, 2008, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make It Dark by peregrin.
450 points, ended August 10, 2008, 81 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn those greenies into Gold (or silver or bronze) pt 4 by whispernthedark.
400 points, ended September 6, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is so amazing. How you have captured what so many of us feel. That the blood is black, that the blackness can somehow leave us through blood, that we may have some control over it. I never thought it "black" so much, as just the "badness" that I needed to bleed out. Just to get it out. And maybe then, be or feel good or "normal." Wow. Thank you for writing this.
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really great!
this is really great work -
Great write hun! x
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Hun this is amazing, Im glad you was able to win a honorable for it, cause it deserved it. One of the best cutter poems i ever truly read. Great job pie.
Sincerely your big brother,
deathwolf tasagka
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Very sad write. Cutting poems hurt to read, one of my dearest friends started cutting because of all the cutting poems she read on here. There are so many other ways to find release. I wish you all the best.
♥
whisper
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Wow!
This poem is so powerful,great form too,good luck in the contest! -
Oh, the pain hidden deep in these words. I understand it so well. The urges to keep cutting, even if they are seen. And never wanting to wake up, I never do too. This hit me, and made me think of myself. This will deffinitly connect to the kids with emotional problems. Really nicely done, luck in the contest!
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Freaking brilliant... I feel it, I am liking it.
Good luck in my contest!
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Thanks yew very muchh =]
hopefully you'll get lotsa more entries too!
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sis as i said before this is an amazing poem! good luck in the contest!
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I usually don't like these kinds of writes...but this one kept me reading...i was squirming! really brought out some deep emotions...good luck
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this is a great write...i relate to every line. you put into words what so many find so hard to say...
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that was pretty good.
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Very moving
Great work, I can really relate to this piece. you have worded it excellently, better than I ever could
. I really like these lines:
Replacing my old pain...with new pain...
Adding to my already large collection...
beautiful work
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Very good, and powerful.
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sis..... every poem..... every single poem.... i know u write but talks 4 both of us..... and YES UR POEMS R GREAT!!!!
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