She held it inside
[it needs to break free]
These doubts in her mind
[Make it so hard to breathe]
So she fights the injustice
[Day after day]
Yeah she fights till the last light
[Turns the sky gray]
Then she asks herself
["What have I done?]
Why did I stay
[When I needed to run?]
It's too late now
[Even she realizes]
That the doorway to life
[Is full of surprises]
'Will I die before the door
[Or will I reach the end?]
I've walked so many miles
[I don't want to do it again']
No second chances
[She needs to break away]
So she leaves her second guesses
[Where she hopes they will stay]
Then takes another step
[She can barely reach the handle]
Her breathing becomes ragged
[Her body feeling hallow]
Only to find
[As she opens the door]
That she's starting to fall
[Right down to the floor]
It was like a bullet to her heart
[A pain she couldn't feel]
Her eyes flashed white
[As the world disappeared]
Only to wake up in bed
[Alarm clock going off]
She could the bus leaving
[The nearest bus stop]
She feels her body
[Afraid she's not whole]
Only to laugh with relief
[When she feels in control]
Then she gets out of bed
[The suns shinning bright]
She feels so safe
[She feels so alive]
But when she turns to the door
[She feels afraid]
It may have been a dream
[But this was no game]
In life you often learn
[Just a little too late]
That the more that you run
[The more you live your fate]
So she takes a deep breathe
[Heads to the door]
Opens it up wide
[Like she had just before]
It's really no surprise
[That the world is so wide]
You could walk for forever
[But you know you can't find
Life anywhere else but home...]
Author notes
...random???
A contest entry
- Photo Inspired Contest: Doorway of Dreams by shepherd23.
450 points, ended July 21, 2008, 10 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like how this started, it really drew me in, I thought it might be good as song lyrics. The short lines made the reader read fast, which gave the reader a sense of what the person in the poem was going through.
I was unsure what was meant by the following:
She could the bus leaving
[The nearest bus stop]
she could what?
also, I thought the poem was a little long, some ines could have been left out.
Overall, Good job! -
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hahahhaaha, i meant 'hear the bus'
...yeah, it was long, but i couldn't find a good end to it...it just...kept coming out line after line, lol
thanks
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