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Candy Clouded Pain

Missing image

 

Time held

cup of youth

 

Coloured sky's

endless days

 

Medicines of laughter

rippled pools of joy

 

Challenging flight

with fantasy

 

Kingdoms

with sticks

 

Rainbows for

climbing

 

Moving holes

for gold

 

In the silence

of the never

time

 

Before lines

were drawn

 

 

 

And the battle

for being

....raged

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

art by;el1as(devintart.com) "in the dark" Poem by tainfinite

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • PerfectImperfection
    July 21

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    Revelry; the bittered edge of reasoning, looking back upon the dawn of days gone by. A well spoken piece to go along with the image - a more somber delve - and lovely.

    "Time held
    cup of youth

    Coloured sky's
    endless days"

    .. great beginning ..

    This piece led a wishful breath of looking back, as innocence reigned. Nicely done. Thank you for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!


  • Scented kiss
    July 11

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    simply beautiful like a time line of adventure and beauty good luck


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    July 9
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    please include your name in the Author notes as per instructions.

  • Denierim
    July 8

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    I adore the imagery you filled this piece with and the subject turning to a battle in the end really added up to the depth. I really like this; these few words really tell a lot.


  • devils angel
    July 7
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    ey like the work here... come through to me easily


  • motel silver member
    July 7
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    imagery and the tone of the poem is great ... love the shift at the end of the work. thanks.

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