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Just Look

Look what you've gone and done

You've stopped yourself from seeing the sun

Look what you've gone and did

You've left us your memory as a kid

Now look what I have to do

Continue walking around feeling blue

But listen to what I have to say

You have taken my life away

    My breath is gone
    My soul is black
    My heart is cold
    My love is lacked

So now what choice do I have left to make

To live each day questioning my mistakes

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  • loveaswellashate
    July 7
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    this is deep.. straight to the point and alot of emotion in just a few lines..great write..


  • Darksadness
    July 6

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    A short write that is direct to its point, I see anger, sadness and blame in this write, quite a lot of feeling for 14 lines. very good


  • TheUglySceneGirl...
    July 6
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    i loved this poem its very good. Great job
  • chocolatechaos
    July 6

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    Tragic and beautiful, so powerful and meticulously crafted piece.  So full of feeling beyond comprehension.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    July 6

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    Such a deeply-sad piece of writing this is. Full of emotion and passion. I don't know what happened here, but whatever it was it is heartbreaking.

    Wayne Leon

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