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Yielding to it

Thaw pardons enough to define purpose
as melting away with death song
that reprieve from crueler symphonies
made to liquefy with false dawn

A raging wall of fast moving desolation
percolates what time eventually shall render

A contest entry

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  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    July 7, 2008

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    wow this is an amazing write of powerful and descriptive words that have a raging flow to them. a wonderful write well done


  • Tattboyspet
    July 7, 2008

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    time renders EVERYTHING nul and void sadly!
    money is nothing, possessions mean nothing, everything ends up for nought in the long run ~shrug~
    congrats on the silver


  • Xianaria gold member
    July 6, 2008

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    A raging wall of fast moving desolation
    percolates what time eventually shall render

    ~ very nicely done! congrats on the silver!


  • PerfectImperfection
    July 6, 2008
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    ...


  • Angelflower
    July 6, 2008

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    this was a wonderful take brother!! you did such a great job!!! i don't want to be in the contest anymore lol... Good luck!!


    Angel


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    July 6, 2008
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    Excellent write

  • PerfectImperfection
    July 6, 2008

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    You people chatting are so not anon lmao (as if I wouldn't have known anyways)!

    Anywho - yes, a very intriguing take on the prompt. That last line leave much food for thought. Thanks so much for your entry!


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    July 6, 2008
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    poke poke, did u enter yet? huh? huh?

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