I fell on my face before the Lord’s cross.
I knew of His grace and I was enchanted.
For His is the place of heavenly streams.
I found the peace that flows in these streams.
I found a new lease that came from the cross.
It shall never cease as I am enchanted.
Heaven before me, I am enchanted.
I found the key to cross the Lord’s streams.
I am now free because of the cross.
Dreams to cross enchanted streams.
Author notes
Tritina with internal rhyme.
In a list
A contest entry
- Tritina by warrior-eagle.
700 points, ended August 25, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow. You really did try and you know it worked very well, and the form was great,the internal rhyme in my opinion was magnificent too. Lovely.
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Oh how I wish for that freedom! Got me a bit choked up as I struggle with faith a lot.. you made it seem so refreshing and uplifting!
Just lovely...
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An accomplished and smooth write, and the internal rhymes are handled expertly. Very well done.
Bill
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Usually, in Christian poetry, I look for tight theology (because most "Christian" poetry on this site is dire!). What I read here says: "Never mind the theology, dig the imagery!" And I do. I like it, Sis.
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This is a very interesting pattern. The fact that you could write in it and make such good sense out of what you have written so impresses me. I very seriously doubt that I could do it all, let alone make it flow as you have done here!
I like the thoughts you express in this poem and I like the way you express them.
Well written!
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Well done...as usual! ***Pam***
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Mystical
wonderful verse, I've never tried a Tritina..
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Bows to a superior poet
The internal rhyme ws so well done it didn't even register. To me, that is the sign of excellent poetry.
Written in form with such flow and rhyme, but not forced, flowes as easily as any free write ever could.
It is an honor to know you and read your words.
Buddy
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Amera, your genious is beyond describing. And, this poem to the Father is so moving. You never disappoint. What a blessing he has bestowed upon you. And you use it so well.
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Well done, my sister in Christ.
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the internal rhyme is something i've never seen before, it's very interesting.
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oh sisss a spiritual piece
yayyyyyy i miss readin your words hun so so much and this tritina is awesome and you inner rhymes 
i like the ending line so so much
lovely work sis
missss your writess a lot
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Amera, a wonderful
tribute to the freedom of your dreams of crossing the streams of the Lord, wonderful words from a wonderful poet.
love, Dora x
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There seems to be no end to the expressions of poetry inside of you...thank God. You are and always will be our shining star. My love to you, Lane
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This is a beautiful poem. You have a rare talent to make religious poetry interesting and meaningful. That is not easy, as the temptation to use cliche is so strong. I am impressed and enjoyed it immensely. Three holy bunnies for you.
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Sis,
You never cease to amaze me with what you come up with! This is fantastic!! I love it!
And the thoughts in this one... So peaceful and calming, great job!!!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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