let's die
die!
there's something wrong inside
do you really want to change it?
you don't really want to face it
so why
why?
is falling down in your plans?
take a look at those bloody hands
tell me what you see...
when there's blood running down your palms
another sin described in the psalm
why can't you just watch and listen?
forget the blades that you've been missin'
why don't you just listen?!
instead of cutting your soul and my heart
and making our world fall apart,
just hear me and you'll be allright
sleep peacefully another night
take these pills and lead me through
a different place described anew
let us float on.. but not wake in the morning
maybe it will destroy me
maybe it will carry me to where you rest
I'm just hoping for the best
a lesser pain
it works the same
you and I will have gone insane
Author notes
i don't often write lyrics, so if it suxx really bad, i'm sorry.
~kassie
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i think it could work as a song, but do you????
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It doesn't suck at all...I think the lyrics work together fine, they are very cohesive and it's a really well-rounded piece of poetry.
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nice job!
I think it could definately work as a song, i think that these two lines are catchy!
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"maybe it will carry me to where you rest
I'm just hoping for the best"... awesome lyrics!!!
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and to be honest ive already tried thats why i like it
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it doesnt suck its wonderful but i have to agree the last knda kills it ha ha maybe u can put no pain instead of finally gone just a suggestion
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i consider changing that part then.
thank you for being honest.
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It doesn't suck, it's awesome but there is one part that sounds a little funnie to meh, it's the last part it says "but at least we will have finally gone" it just doesn't fit to me..but oter then that it's real good :] it could be a hxxc amazing song!
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