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Murder

Wind swept fields

In carnage burns

Their muffled cries

This child will learn

His pleasures quick

But pain is true

Why fight the flames

It burns for you

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Their morrows dream

Will bear no light

Cast upward through

His sleepless fight

Fortunes favor

A fevered blight

Ravaged Angels

Dead of fright

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He walks the lot

Their tickets threw

To pull the straw

Of harvest new

He drinks the blood

Of chaos true

To fill their lungs

A mind askew

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To serve the one

To sleep at night

Bound and gagged

They cannot fight

Severed limbs

Unfettered sight

To see the rack

Their endless plight

Aerials in the Sky

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  • Agony Creeps
    July 8, 2008

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    you rhyme so well, I've never been able to understand how you rhyme so well...it flows like the depths of dark pools we often get swept away with.
    Not going to lie I had to read it twice...

  • Anyajoellienne
    July 8, 2008
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    quite graphic
    smooth rhyme
    very dark would go well with a horror movie


  • Catressa gold member
    July 8, 2008

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    the endless darkness I know you carry makes me shudder..
    But reading this, I also find myself drawn into the abyss;
    when you have touched really been swept up into something that you can't fucking control, and the answers are there but you.. you can't seem to grasp them? It burns like acid.

    I shouldn't have read this..yet it was that powerful..