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necropolis.

Tombstones, they were
grave in their expression of
what was thrown away with
wild abandon:

green and lush and poisonously gorgeous,
given up for pleasures all
here-and-now,
microwaveble dinners and drive thru coffee,

instant gratification generation
generating
cold, artless towers of
self-destruction.

"Intangible and
not fully realized until
there was nothing left
to cherish."

Author notes

necropolis:
http://bp2.blogger.com/_mk-LiBhV7-M/R-18HNXDk2I/AAAAAAAAAB8/bH_KAV7PJjs/s1600-h/necropolis.jpg, İFred Einaudi

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  • Ladyfyre
    July 22
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    [deep formal bow]

    Every once in a while, you just do something really good. This is one. Second and last verse. I typed them up and hung them on my wall together as "excerpts from [the piece]" by Kendal Baldwin, 2008.

    Chilling, as well, and true. Brainwashed. And liking it.

    ~Ladee


  • Elrenia
    July 7

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    Interesting. Very nice imagery. Some of the thoughts seem incomplete, as if the reader is led but does not reach the conclusion. Otherwise, this is a very nice read.

    Well wishes in the contest.
    Thank you for sharing.

    rous
  • Beautiful. The last two stanzas flow very well. You have a new fan