As Autumn leaves lose blushing hue,
they take on Winter's browning hue.
Gloom descends upon Earth's face,
'Neath wintry clouds of dulling hue.
Thoughts revert to times of sadness,
of lonely days with lulling hue.
A friendless world in wintry white,
of stony cold, depressing hue.
As Alice waits for Spring to bloom
she's lost within sobering hue.
Author notes
Form - Ghazal
Prompt - Melancholy
Ghazal
A Ghazal is a poem that is made up like an odd numbered chain of couplets, where each couplet is
an independent poem. It should be natural to put a comma at the end of the first line. The Ghazal
has a refrain of one to three words that repeat, and an inline rhyme that preceedes the refrain.
Lines 1 and 2, then every second line, has this refrain and inline rhyme, and the last couplet should
refer to the authors pen-name... The rhyming scheme is AA bA cA dA eA etc.
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetic Form: Ghazal - Prompt - Melancholy by Little Eagle.
600 points, ended July 11, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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now i have one posted in this form celestial supremacy, i think this form works really well, a good poem.
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Thank you for your entry
Another poem on the hues of color. It certainly is somber and melancholy. For me though the single word refrain just doesn't work, it becomes cumbersome and tedious. Dulling the meaning for me.
You definitely followed the form completely. The lines were a little uneven but for the most part you kept them pretty close in length.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
Interesting form you're using - I like how you refer to yourself in the last couplet. Although this is the repeated word => hue, color is absenting itself, that its vibrancy and leaving its ghost. Definitely sounds as if you're in a sober lull.
Marlene -
oh this form looks interesting specily since you done a great job with it
xxx cheeky xxx
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