Yesterday: We put in our palms a smile
We were so happy that our palms were laughing
Crazy with happiness we bumped our head Heaven
The pain defeat us and threw us back on Earth
Today: When we woke up we were two trees
And our hands were branches of despair
We beg the Heaven to bring back the happiness
Seeing that nobody is listening
We decided to help ourselves
Tomorrow: Our hands will grow beneath the Earth
And so we will find ourselves again
We`ll catch in our hands the smile
And our faces looking to heaven
Will smile with shyness
Blossoming for the first time
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired by Manda Kathryn.
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Reminds me of an old greek myth, about two lovers who were turned into trees entwinded with each other.
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Yes, the poem is partially based on the myth of the two lovers who dared to call themselves Hera and Zeus and were punished for it.
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That's pretty cool.
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good poem but what does it have to do with
HALLOWEEN
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nothing.why?
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Tomorrow: Our hands will grow beneath the Earth
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If you read the second stanza you see that the people "transform" into trees.
Our hands will grow beneath the Earth means we`ll grow rooths.You know when two trees are to close to each other and their roots unite, like two shy lovers holding hands under the table.If in the first stanza the love is crazy, and in your face , in the last one she is shy, calm and foreseeing
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Okay, I got you. Thank you for explaining.
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this is awesome. What is ur username? who did u want to be in my family?
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my username is baby blue and I`d like to be your sister as I don`t have neither a real one , nor one on AP
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I like this a lot.
Thank you for entering and good luck ♥
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I loved how this was written! It's a wonderful write, Keep up the great work!
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Beautifully penned, I very much enjoyed this from beginning to end
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Thank you & Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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I found this really cute but your spelling errors kinda take away from the meaning of it, for lack of a better word. Now I'm not the perfect speller but, you spelled Crazy,Happiness, Threw, Despair, Begged, Seeing, Tomorrow, and Beneath, wrong. Other than that it was very promising, made me feel hopeful. I loved the line We'll catch in our hands the smile. Nice write.
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well I`m not a native english speaker and that stupid spell check said "No mistakes found" but I promise I`ll fix them
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