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Night Process

'Tis I, the master
The mistress
Thy savior
Thy slave
Under the chocolate covered walls
Where I am imprisoned underneath my hours
When my eyes should be chained down
But beneath the lampshade
I rest none
I rest late
And maneuver my sly tool to it's shy companion
Ripped from nature's best
Nature's soul
And trapped in those packages of which we tear open
And maneuver our sly tools to it's shy surface

For every curve, it makes itself anew
When it brings itself against the penciled lines
It forms that heavenly shape
That recognizable shape
And a face is born
Its complexion upon the mild artificial light
This is not an artificial piece
Artificial talent
Accommodated with the artificial heart
Nonsense!
I'm all there is real
Under the night's lampshade

My light has meddled
My eye is blind from error
My hand is uncoordinated
Sly tool worn away
And at the moment I wish I had artificial talent
To back up the void.
'Tis my turn to rest
And my resting is late
'Tis my time to chain my eyes
And reminiscence of the memories
Of which will have tears through the locked chains

Of which will have giggles through the should-be shut lips

Breaking the silence within the chocolate walls

And renewing itself again

And again

After each interruption

Each distraction

Inner applaud

You fraud

I shall behead thee of such trespassing

 

Halt!

Your dreams at an ease

Control yourself lad

And stop talking like that.

Bewilder yourself upon the lampshade

 

Mind once set

With each thought attacking the mind

The inner excellence

Regret and stupidity enclosed and always forgotten

Not having the chance to rewind to the thought

And continue to a new

 

Remember your people

 

Remember their words.

 

You don't have to use big words to win people's hearts~

I agree

But I do not apply

 

What is your reason~

I don't know

But I fake an answer

 

How is you 45 year old cat~

Fine, thank you.

Though I don't recall such a cat.

 

PALABISH!

   BISHBRIEL!

 

No, I don't have a ringworm! I looked up the symptoms!

 

Ninjas?

  Lawsuit?

 

GASP, GASP

And laughter the following

 

The giggles fade

Into the imagery of such silly wants

Silly needs

Silly amusement

Interruption

From the applaud

You fraud!

I shall behead thee of such trespassing!

 

Halt!

Spat on thee, that old senile pencil

Waving against your wet face

Shut down the device

It's system is heating up

Whip away those clouds, please?

It's hard for me to say

PALABISH

   BISHBRIEL

Have you no manners?

Come forth, I beckon, to the same light that guides you awake 

 

And it soon fades off into the dark

As I climb down to turn off the lampshade

And half of the process resets.

Author notes

Nalyn - Rayna

I tried to make it my longest (and randomest) piece. xD My first 100-liner.
It's about what I basically go through before falling asleep. I draw, then remember weird things that me and my friends did, start to fall asleep into a random scene, my brother makes a noise and wakes me up, I try to fall asleep again, yada yada yada...


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  • thepoetsings
    July 14

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    Editorial comments:
    - line 6. "chocolate-covered" needs to be hyphenated
    - lines 12 & 16. "its" doesn't need an apostrophe
    - lines 15, 39-40. lose the "of" in "of which"
    - line 75. was "you" supposed to have been "your"?; I believe "year-old" needs to be hyphenated

    I read the author's notes and so I understand what you were trying to do. However, as the reader I was totally clueless as to what was going on. My suggestion: if you want to relay to us what happens when you're falling asleep, let us (the readers) know what you're trying to tell us about. Your thoughts may get scrambled, sure - but keep in mind that poetry is written for people to read, and those very people need to be able to glean something from it.
    • Eh. Grammar is not on my side.
      Well, I wasn't trying to make the reader to understand it. It's like one of those poems where you have to figure it out. Unless you can't figure it out, then it's bad. xD
      Thank you~!

  • Iloveugh
    July 6

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    LOVERS IT. very well written/ LONG but i loved it dearly. my favorite part was "For every curve, it makes itself anew
    When it brings itself against the penciled lines
    It forms that heavenly shape
    That recognizable shape
    And a face is born
    Its complexion upon the mild artificial light
    This is not an artificial piece
    Artificial talent
    Accommodated with the artificial heart
    Nonsense!
    I'm all there is real
    Under the night's lampshade" Thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
    Shelly
  • Hm,
    I don't find this melancholy at all.
    Sorry, but I'm going to have to DQ you from my contest.
    It was a well written piece, it just isn't what I'm looking for.
    Thank you.



    ~Princess of Shadows~
    • Yeah, I sorta figured that out when I actually searched up the word Melancholy on the dictionary. -facepalm-

      Sorry about that.

  • Iloveugh
    July 6
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    Good i liked this alot. My favorite part was when you said "Halt!

    Your dreams at an ease

    Control yourself lad

    And stop talking like that.

    Bewilder yourself upon the lampshade



    Mind once set

    With each thought attacking the mind

    The inner excellence

    Regret and stupidity enclosed and always forgotten

    Not having the chance to rewind to the thought

    And continue to a new"



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