You ever just sit back and think about everything
But in that process
You think about nothing
Sometimes so much is going on in your head
That you don't think about anything at all
It just seems like your mind is utterly blank...
When you sit back
Trying to see into your future
Trying to see that next step that must be taken
Where will you end up
Whom will you end up with
But, all you see is darkness
The black abyss of nothingness
A black hole sucking up all your dreams
All your hopes...
Look up into the stars
Just let the world around you move
But still be conscious of everything
Yet simply nothing
Just sitting there dazed
Like your mind ran away and hid
From everything, The responsibilities
All the choices that are need to be made
Leaving you blank to the outside world...
How is it possible to continue in life
When each step is measured with an inflicted mind
That each choice made
Is a spur of a moment thought
No knowledge put into it
Like running blind through a forest
Moving with gut instinct and a hesitant mind
Praying that there are no cliffs ahead
But somewhere in your congested mind whispers
Theres always a cliff
Always an end...
When you go over that edge
And your life is supposed to flash before your eyes
Showing all forgotten memories
Everything you care about
But what if
What if nothing flashed
Just a blank canvas
Where magnificent art should be
But nothing is there...
What happens when you meet the end
Still doing everything in sporadic footsteps
Never being sure of whats going to happen
Never knowing what was going to happen
Seconds, Minutes, Days, Years, Decades later...
But you one thing you know
That one day
You will die
And then what?
Is there an after life for the mindless living
Is there a place
For the mindless dead?
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Truly deeply relative
Aww Ashes, it touches me that you go so deep into the big picture. The whole feeling of this write is very relative to how I have much as of late. Just running blind through the forest yes, Running fast too.
So hard to focus on just one thing and go with it when you ponder just how much it means in the end. You expressed the feeling so well. Reminded me of questions I have asked myself and even some I tried to forget. But through it all, all we can really do is keep running. Just slow the pace a lil and tilt our heads up to try and sneak a peak through the blindfold.
I loves ya back lil dark kitty poet. *pet pet pet*
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very deep
one we can all relate to,
and very soulful
beautifully put to together,
thank you for your entry
God bless...
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divine.
this poem reminds me a lot of my own style which a lot of people have a hard time appreciating. some think that it must have a rhythmic display to be poetry but i love the feeling that i'm just free-flow reading along as if i'm having a conversation with you. this is absolutely lovely. i love this piece.
beyond the mechanics... this has explained my feeling oh too many times in my life. in fact, i'm pretty sure everyone's felt this way at least once, maybe, probably.
very very wonderful job... and as for you, i hope you can find something to pull you out of the abyss.
best wishes and good luck! -
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The only thing that should be changed is in this line "All the choices that are need to be made" the 'are' should be taken out other wise the poem flows beautifully and is all together a wonderfull write.
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We all have these moments, I'm sure. When left alone in his/her thoughts for too long, there's no telling what skeletons will resurface from someone's closet. Well done, and good luck!
Laura x
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Excellent
You know I lost my son in September and I could totally relate to this poem more then I'd like to even say, but it is true.
Is there an after life for the mindless living
Is there a place
For the mindless dead?
I've pondered this many of times for my son overdosed. You just never know when it is your time. He was clean and sober and used in one day and died. I found him home alone dead on the bathroom floor. Talk about devistating, histerical and confused!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Excellent expression of thoughts. Thank you for sharing with me.
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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im very sorry to hear about your son.. in a way im glad that you understand and can relate to my poem but in a sadden way i wish you didnt under that circumstance... and my heart goes to you for your loss thank you for the comment
*hugs*
Loves....
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Damn I can relate
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