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As We Travel On Now

on giant venus flytraps we sail across the world

hiding somewhere above the earth, beneath the clouds

long past where mushroom rings end

orange stripes blaze across the forgotten sky

and sprites dance beyond the whispering wind


we all need each other, we all need someone
we all need each other, we all need someone


thundering skies reveal secrets untold

ships sail through a torrent of desolate seas

trees quiver at each surreal sound

magic is lost as we travel on
magic is lost as we travel on






Author notes

thoughts that come while the mind is beyond comprehension

I wrote this after listening to The Beatles a lot one day.

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  • SimplySonnets gold member
    March 25

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    Liked this

    The fantasy is great, love to go to sea on the venus flytrapp, on the right gear that is. very good


  • sleepingINblackRain
    September 6, 2008

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    This is different, Different is a very good thing

    It's light, but heavy in thought, full of fantasy, A bit of drugs maybe

    It just, hmm words don't seem to describe

    Very creative and excellent word

    Thank you for entering


  • Riamh
    August 22, 2008

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    Well! That's certainly different! I enjoyed imagining it and it surely led to an interesting visual.
    I like the sentiments:we all need each other, we all need someone.
    Well done.
    Slayer


  • NeptunesMight
    August 15, 2008

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    so we can sail on ships, peaches, and giant venus flytraps .. sweet! imagine if the whole world was upside down..(cocks head almost upsidedown) ... we'd see alota used gum under tables i think.

  • ozma
    July 8, 2008

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    Nice

    I like your imagery--orange stripes blaze across the forgotten sky--ships sail through a torrent of desolate seas


  • kirbysman Moderators member
    July 6, 2008

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    Well, well, well, what do we say to this? Tee hee. Beyond comprehension now. Interesting thoughts, moods and pictures created there ma'am in your land beyond comprehension. Not sure if it's beautiful or scary though. Riding on giant Venus Flytraps could get you devoured I bet.

    But, we all need each other and we all need someone are great thoughts and very true I think.

    And, made one correction for you.

    Love and hugs,
    Grampa Paul

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