They told me you were bad news, Boy.
They told me you would eat me up,
eat me up and spit me out.
I would be just one more on your list…
and that wouldn’t bother you one bit.
So as I’m smiling does it make you wonder?
Don’t you wonder what I’m hiding?
I know that look in your eyes,
and I know it well…even if I don’t know you.
It speaks to me in volumes, so much lust,
so little time to fuck your way to nothing.
So as I smile that come-hither smile,
that raspberry red, fuck-me smile…
doesn’t it make you wonder?
Don’t you wonder what I’m hiding?
I see you looking, and I see you smile.
It’s not a smile that’s just for me;
it’s the smile you reserve for seduction.
And as you come closer our legs brush,
a slight touch to inflame the senses.
So as I smile and move away,
don’t you wonder what I’m hiding?
Don’t you wonder why they match—
these come-hither, fuck-me smiles?
Or did you really think you were that smooth?
Author notes
Well, now that chapter seventeen of Shackle the Moon is out, there's no use hiding who Wood's interest is. This is written in Rei's perspective, about Wood. I thought it was hilarious. Inspired in Freewrite's "hiding behind a smile". Thoughts?
Thoughts?
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I'm almost sorry I read this one. Unfortunately, this is an exact description. Good poetry- that's the key. I hope this didn't really happen to you.
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Haha oh no! This is based on two characters in a novel I'm writing. He's a man-whore and she's playing him. Thought he was too smooth to get caught at his game.
Thanks so much for the applause and comment, hun. Greatly appreciated. 
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Wonderful
Very creative and full of intense emotions. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Thanks, hun.
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So much bitterness in this piece..but I like it just the way it is..being lure into such situation it is hard to deny or fight back..once you fall you fall deep..but if you ever pull yourself up and get out of that hell..don't look back..desire are devil in disguise to many..amazingly done!!!
And don't worry about reading two of my piece I'm just read other ppl's better than getting returned if you want to do me a favor then I want you to keep writing and have fun!!!
Keep penning!!!
Lieu
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Thanks for the applause and comment, Lieu. I'm still not entirely satisfied with this piece, but I like it for what it is (three minute offering inspired in free write). Thanks so much for the encouraging words and praise, though. I'll return the favor even if you tell me not to.
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*fans self*
DAMN!! That was hot...lol. Loved it. Really. Very edgy and sexy, with just enough grit.
Don't kill me but I thought you had given up on STM because of that plagiarism fiasco. I'm all confusicated now. I'll catch up, though. No worries. Thanks for the heads up.
Lerves!!
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Haha...well hot is my forte. I think I'm finally edging into quasi erotic poetry. I'll send you a message with the entire details of what happened and the actions I'm taking as far as STM is concerned. Rest assured that it's not dying out, though. Thanks for the applausals and commentation, love!
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I counted the word "smile" used 8 times.
No biggie. I guess that word just gets on my nerves in repetition. yeuck.
but there's something supposed to be playful and furthermore... mmm, you know, about the usage so I can let it slide.
Definitely a naughty 'voice' here.
Likin' it. XD
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I had actually noted that already. I figured I'd go back and edit it, but I've been a bit busy. Besides, I like to give my brain a bit to get off the original vibe so I can have a fresh perspective when looking at it. At any rate, thanks for the comment and applause. Muchly appreciated. Which two of yours would you like me to read/comment on?
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i totally agree with the person below me.
neon =D
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Thanks for reading and commenting, hun. Maybe it is a bit of a jab. Which two of your pieces would you like me to look at?
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Pretty darn good
got a nice rythm to it! Seems to be one hell of a bite at someone.
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Not so much a bite at someone. It's actually about characters in a novel I'm writing. I guess it's more social commentary, as well. Everyone knows those types.
Thanks for the applause and comment, dear. Which two of yours would you like me to read/comment?
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I really like the character of the poetic voice that you've created and the attitude expressed. The use of language perfectly encapsulates this and the rhetorical question you repeat is extremely appropriate in conveying this. Nice write, thanks for sharing, look forward to reading more. Cheers and keep writing.
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Ah, I suppose the character was easier to capture because I'm writing a novel with her in it. All the same, I'm glad you could appreciate this. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment. Requests for the two I read and comment?
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Very Mae West,
some Tom waits in there.
Smiles are so great,
they can mean your real happy
or just an insane smile before you snap.
Great job.
It's darkest
before the poem.
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Thanks so much for the comment. To be compared to Mae West in any degree. *touches hand to chest* An honor. Any requests for the two I read/comment?
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