Got the sugar blues
What to do?
Sugar & I don’t mix,
yet I feel I need a fix
Quick….get the Stevia
before I feel any heavier
Sugar makes me frantic
I can’t get enough
This sweet tooth’s rotting my bones
I get big & fat, want to be alone
I just can’t make light of this
Sweets have been a plague since I was six
Or was it earlier?
Doesn’t much matter
Sometimes feel as mad as a hatter
when I’ve got a hanker to fill up my tanker
with all of the sweet stuff
Got the sugar blues
What to do?
Words: K.Botka
7/6/08
Author notes
Couldn't resist this. I'm a recovering Obsessive Compulsive Binge Eater, who's also a Nutritionist without a degree who's been waging a battle with overweight all her life & has a Major sweet tooth that I pretty much keep at bay now with my Nutritional know how & learning experience. Sugar is like poison to me! Hope all you "normal" folk who can imbibe don't hate me for this piece! LOL...
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Comments
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I'm lucky I suppose I am more of a savoury person, I do like honey in tea though. Or maybe a Jaffa cake sometimes. I think it works as a form, it breaks it up into a staccato almost rap form. You could probably sing it to a blues or rap backing track. Nice rhymes & some nice assonances 'bones, alone'. I have always been a few kilograms underweight. I can't think of anything else the poem needs. You could go on forever about what makes you want to eat sweets, but you have kept it short & sweet!
Just one thing: What exactly is Stevia? -
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Jaffa Cake?
Always learning something new from you Dave! What
pray tell is a Jaffa Cake? Few kilograms underweight? 
Man...that sounds awesome!
No one could call you 
I have to go to WiKi now & look up Jaffa Cake. I think I'm hungry now! 
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Oh! What a personal take, the perils of sugar...very real. I'm not a huge fan of the form....Athough, it sort of reminds me of a piece of candy. I think it would be better left-aligned and broken up a bit, but that's just me
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"Sometimes feel as mad as a hatter
when I’ve got a hanker to fill up my tanker">>These lines made me crack up. I love the humor you brought to this.
Thank you for entering my contest.
& g'luck!
~Pt
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