Within each of us upon this earth,
we hold a piece of his soul at birth.
Through our eyes he does see ,
and brings help to you from others
my child did you know it was me.
I sent you help all along the way,
and as they reached out what did you say .
Did you push them away did you see their tears,
how they showed such love while I was near.
So often people say I'm not really real,
for I have prayed for help and received no deal.
Yet I was there and help was sent,
only son you didn't see while your mind was bent.
The drugs distorts the visions, and lies to you every day,
It causes whispers in the mind saying go away.
When was the last time you believed in me,
I was always there ready to set you free.
Did you come to me did you take their hands,
To know in order to feel this love you must change your plan.
Look to those happy not ones who walks the streets,
for to find salvation in me you will find such peace.
No more tears no more pain,
and your vision will be clear again .
No more whispers no more in the allies alone,
For through God is where love is sewn.
Listen not to the whispers of the drugs today,
for they are truly the devils work at play.
He so wants you to give up this life you hold,
Only we who knows love knows this is just not so.
Those free of drugs can see that person within,
they see you without the droopy eyes or crooked grin.
They see a young man or woman in such joy for life,
something you are unable to see this night.
Why do we see this and you don't this day,
Its the drugs running in your veins.
Ask one who has liked and they will tell you true,
that beneath the drugs there is a person brand new.
Believe me that person is you.
Author notes
Please if you are on drugs please know I love you and want you to live and to do this let us help talk to us . See all those who loves you today
A contest entry
- Protect Life by Arkbear.
3300 points, ended July 16, 30 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is a powerful cry to the person controlled by drugs of any sort.
Very well done and powerful. I know it will touch the hearts that are waiting for His rescue.
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Wow stories this was great. I definitely think a lot of people could relate to this. It is very nicely done. Great write, good luck in the contest
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: He Does Guide Us To Your Rescue
This piece tugged hard at my Spirit, I read Your words several times and I felt the Love within Your message and I was nudged to this line: for they are truly the devils wok (work) at play- in stanza 7 : So true re: Drugs- Drugs can destroy and alter the true beauty of a Gift and I imagine there are others who could relate I'm Blessed You are here
Excellent Voice to Inspire
Powerful images You have brought forth
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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This is where we start to find where they are. When they open up to us. We want to help.
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beautifully written as "the Lord " stands up and works his miracles
thank you for sharing good luck
...Lin
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This was a beautiful write..All heart and compassion reaching out to those who have drug related problems..Lovely rhyme and flow throughout. Alot of thought went into this poem!
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Such a beautiful message with open arms ... inspirational and inviting, definitely remarkable what the pen can emit emotionally ...
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This is a good message beyond doubt, when caught up in the world of drugs one does not look for the answers in life they look dor the next bag, the next fix the person that can get them high and that becomes a perpetual cycle to nowhere but depression. I don't believe that anyone can expect through belief in God or otherwise that their life can be absent of pain or negative emotions they are part of life but there are different degrees and ways to deal with them and faith in a higher power is certainly the better. good write
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A very strong write Patty
Well done, and all the best to you!
Sol
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This is a great message
I love the meaning of this poem!
I do think with a few technical corrections your voice could be heard all the louder, here are a few suggestions:
3rd stanza 1st line-Im=I'm,
4th stanza 1st line-destorts=distorts and perhaps the line should say "the drug distorts your visions, and lies to you every day"?
5th stanza 4th line-slavation-salvation
8th stanza 1st line-fre-free
9th stanza 1st line-dont=don't
You have a really great thought here. I just think with a bit of editing you could strengthen this poetic voice
Great job!! Keep writing!!
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A Reaching Piece....
you have penned here. You show your reaching hand through your words of faith and love to those who are on drugs using them as an escape from their evryday probems or maybe abusive childhoods,divorces all the woes of this life. Thanks for reaching ot to thse with your hear and your wods and know that God will and is usung those wods from his very heart to help those out there who are willing to read the and listen the the messages detailed within.!!!~~Toni~~
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Thank you for bringing such a powerful message of Hope from drugs and addiction....you have opened my eyes again, to the power which those drugs had over me.....and because of this write, you are reaching out to so many.......and through your words, you shall be blessed for taking the time to reach out......keep reaching! ~
God bless you.....and I enjoyed the rhyme as well :)
Bear ~
When was the last time you believed in me,
I was always there ready to set you free.
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I love this pic!
And the poem as well!
You always hit the spot, right on the heart...
your pen name should be Cupid!
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Ah, drugs. Stuff that I am not on, except medical drugs. This might not effect the people who don't believe in God. Very nice write though grandma =) Good luck in the contest!
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Drug abuse is a very big problem facing our country. It does not seem to be getting any better. Some find their way out of the life, many are consumed.
I liked the way that you dealt with the prayer issue at the beginning of your poem. It is a reason that many give for denying God. I believe that in time, all prayers are answered, however, it is not always in the way that we desire or expect.
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Thank you for sharing such an excellent poem on the effects of addictions. Wonderfully written. My best wishes always.
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wonderful poem with strong advice that many today people never find before it is to late the following lines realy stand out so much to me
Within each of us upon this earth,we hold a piece of his soul at birth. for to find slavation in me you will find such peace.No more tears no more pain,
and your vision will be clear again .Listen not to the whispers of the drugs today,for they are truly the devils wok at play. Ask one who has liked and they will tell you true,that beneath the drugs there is a person brand new.Believe me that person is you.good luck in the contest my friend
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Oh my! what an absolutely beautiful, sad, emotionally charge poem! It almost brought me to tears!!!
I just saw a couple of typos, but they in no way detract from the hugely strong message you put forth! Indeed, drugs are a blight upon humanity.
Thank you for sharing this incredible poem, and all the best to you in the contest,
Luck.
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