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A wish........or two

I wish I had a bottle...

Then I'd capture
those sweet memories
those moments of rapture

I would lock up tight
your voice telling me that you love me
the words that gave me such sweet delight

I would bottle up
your words that said you care for me
I would grasp it in my grip
and not let it free
never let it slip

The melody of you voice
would dry up the tears
and take away my fears

And if its not too much to wish for
If I could wish for one thing more

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I wish I had a second bottle

Then I'd whisper
"I love you and care for you too"
Then I'd set it on the ocean's waves
and send it off to you

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  • urban cowboy
    November 20
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    sweet

    That's really the word that came to mind...not the slang sweet, but the honey/sugar sweet...Basically it was really nice sounding. It's the kinda thing that is nice to hear from someone that loves you. The imagery was very beautiful, and I really thought the whole second bottle thing was very clever. Great write!


  • passionate.angel
    January 28

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    Incredible!!!! I absolutely love this peice. It has an amazing effect and story to it. congrats on such an outstanding peice of writing!!!
    .ashley.


  • insearchofsweetness
    July 19, 2008

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    very sweet poem

    Hey that hope angel person took my comment which was

    Aaawwwwwww.

    I like it, and I can't believe I missed a new poem! Geesh. Where have I been anyway?


  • Hope Angel silver member
    July 12, 2008
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    aaawwww this is so beautiful. I loved it. Thanks for sharing.


  • going nowhere
    July 6, 2008

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    reading this right now... well... i am choking down tears and wishing the melody of his voice would dry them...

    i can't even express what these words mean to me, actually... on a few levels.
    to give my heart and love someone to the point that my happiness means less than his...i know i have found it. not necessarily in a romantic way, but in a truthful way that makes me know wishes are granted... for love is about giving to the other and making a commitment to see through anything...
    and when memories are bottled, then i smile, and i too will place my bottle on the ocean waves and pray he gets it in time to know... love can never give enough.


    absolutely wonderful... loved each word and image you had in this... and the emotion it stirred in me can't be described.


    • walking in the rain
      July 7, 2008
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      Thanks so much for the great comment. I'm glad you liked it! I'm gonna head to your page and read some of your work! Thanks again!


  • Blue Skies and Pain
    July 6, 2008

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    sweet! my favorite part was the second wish thing.. and everything after that... cuz that was totally original.

    so who is this about??? eh???

    good poem... now go write more...

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