Deep in my soul past my heart
the urges and surges, my dark place to start
Alone you crave and save the day in rainy dreams
the pain that ripped apart my seams
you
for you
alone for loving you
Late in my day through my back
like a wilted flower i bend to attack
Alone i live and give the night my themes
the pain that ripped apart your seams
me
for me
alone for taking me
Tears in my eyes glancing away
the heat complete, you approach, I slay
Alone we twist in mist as our skin steams
the pain that ripped apart our seams
us
for us
paradise forsaking us
Author notes
2. Slow train to paradise.
A contest entry
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Comments
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Very nicely done, thank you for your fine entry in this contest.
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Judge:
Sigh. I have looked at 4 entries. Three of them didn’t take the contest rules seriously. Please re-read the rules. If you want to edit your poem to meet the rules, please do. If you don’t want to change your poem, no hard feelings. It’s good and will fit well into some contest somewhere.
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Late in my day through my back
like a wilted flower i bend to attack
Alone i live and give the night my themes
the pain that ripped apart your seams
me
for me
alone for taking me- that part was my favorite part it was just amazing. Thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
Shelly -
*shivers* what a stunning poem! that last line is just incredible, gives this piece the most perfect ending.
Thanks for sharing this,
Luck.
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