Doses by penman at All poetry

Saccharin veneers,

conceived by Willie Wonka

electoral chocolate panhandlers,

concocting syrupy doses

of utopian fudge promises.

Quixotic candied visionary insulin,

panacea's artificial honey,

served in sermonized increments

possessed of prosperity's sweetener tease,

sugar coated prescriptions

for social maladies

spoils in reality's stomach juices.

Swallowed virginity

imbibes the medicinal

charade,

cyanide clarity

oozes its toxins,

doubt's diabetic

forced to feast

upon truth's balanced diet.

Until compulsion

overpowers

with lust for opiate candy high,

another fix craved that numbs logic's pancreas,

abandoning reason's regime,

accepting fabrication's gum drops

from opposing party's

Slugworth clone.

Author notes

Prompt: "A spoonful of sugar"

A contest entry

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Sailor Ptolema
July 12
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OH! Love the 2 Wonka references.... Lust for sweets, & Slugworth, how very appropriate! What an interesting take on the prompt...the dark side of sugar, and it's artificial uses. You use lovely & unique metaphors; as per your usual. . Thank you for this decadent (and dark) entry.!

and g'luck!

~Pt
notorious
July 6

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If penman enters anything, Jessica has no chance of garnering a trophy. =D LMAO

Oh man!! This is fantastic. "Saccharin veneers, (where can I get some of those, LoL?), conceived by Willy Wonka"
Too clever!! Man, awesome reference. =D

"of utopian fudge promises"
Utopian huh? =D I used that word in my entry as well...Cool coincidence, and great phrase =]

"Quixotic candied visionary insulin"
Wow. 'Quixotic' is a charmingly unique word, and the rest is good too. That must be some insulin..

"sermonized increments"
Brilliant...sounds awesome.

"possessed of prosperity's sweet tease"
I would like to experience prosperity...it would taste sweet

"sugar coated prescriptions"
Should be a hyphen (-) in between 'sugar' and 'coated. Otherwise...this is so mysterious. Is it a lying prescription? Or rather, a false approach to life?

That third stanza has a helluva lot of alliteration and unique phrases...excellence!!

"opiate candy high"
Your vocabulary is immensely impressive...

Love the ending as well...Slugworth...this is a reference I didn't catch, but I'm sure it works in the context because you are a freaking genius. (:
chiefmac
July 6

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Nice look at life, sugar and chocolate coated, vaniers leave a taste to good to be true. We suck in opportunity for making mega millions in realestate just send in the thirty-nine, ninety five in three payments, to guarantee refund if it does not work as our metphor outlook. The obese sent through the fast food line to feed the desires of it is fast, simple and fried in low sodium oils to reduce calories. Both views hold reality at bay with promises of wealth and to have it now. Great work as our society collects insults on the health channel of being to fat, it is sweet and painless.
Karl Weiss - Topaz
July 6
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Very nicely done, my best wishes always.
maralisa
July 6

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brillaint poem on lifes candy fixs
sugar coated prescriptions for social maladies spoils in reality's stomach juices.Until compulsion overpowers
with lust for opiate candy high,another fix craved that numbs logic's pancreas,abandoning reason's regime,
accepting fabrication's gum dropsfrom opposing party's
Slugworth clone. good luck in the contest
BuriedTreasures
July 6

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Excellent Contest entry accomplished with your continual mastery of Vocabularistic skill---Well Done & Good Luck to you!!