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When

 

Me

as i sit

to smoke this

cigarette with God

feeling myself being

seen and known

to impossible

that I'm

not

 

a silent compassion hits my brittleness  

a tenderness and all forgiveness

surrounds and bathes me

before even a word

is heard

 

I reflect

on the days

already looked after

the wonder indeed that I'm still here and alive

that things aren't and haven't been so bad

in outside affairs maybe

but inside I am still His

 

And in this remembrance

He makes Himself mine

 

How much more so

when I've washed

and He kneels me with intended devotion

 

There is nothing in this life

which can't be transformed in an instant

No prison cell which can't be demolished

 

Strip away everything

what can possibly remain

but the Beauty of Sheer Truth

 

We already have our own limitations why adopt any more

Simply reach out to being true to yourself

There is no dogma here you are your Truth

 

 

Call Truth Him She It Rah or Brahmin no matter

give meaning of yourself to the Greatest

you can imagine, find certainty it is less

than a grain of the Real's Compassion

You are what you believe you are

and become what you believe

 

Life pure gift invitation

to hold and give

to its meaning

Your own in uniqueness

Don't forget to love your own soul

Such a freedom's choice of treasure

to hold on to and be held by forever

 

Real satisfaction for a true heart is Real

 

 

 

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  • Amarige
    July 14

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    Congratulation in your award..very well deserved Karim

    Ruby

  • parenchma
    July 12
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    Enjoyed this. It stretches the mind a bit...

  • thelordreigns gold member
    July 12

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    Your poetry is so splendid. I am so glad I am getting to know you as a writer through these contest run by Bear. Everything you pen is excellent but I truly love your creativity with form.

    This poem is beautiful. It does reflect the light of hope - sometimes so clear to us and sometimes so dim but never snuffed out completely.

    How wonderful that when all is said and done with our day we can find peace in that place that knows that "inside I am still His/And in this remembrance/He makes Himself mine."

    So beautiful.

    - jo -


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      July 12
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      Much thanks for your generous words jo.

      I am also pleased to be making your acquaintance, I can tell from your words and poetry I've read, that you are also one who has a real sentiment alive for true meaning.

      Your comment much appreciated.

      Sol

  • Desire gold member
    July 11

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: When
    This piece tugged hard at my Spirit, I read Your words several times and I felt the rush of race horses leave the spiritual gates after they opened which is a good thing I must say. I look beyond the form but go into the depths of message presented and Love the reference to: Strip away everything and Life pure gift invitation I'm Blessed You are here
    Excellent Voice to Inspire
    Powerful images You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • XPandyxFangirlX
    July 11

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    Lots of topics are covered in this spiece.
    It was simply outstanding.
    Now I will tell the truth here, sometime s I did get a bit bored, but then you laid out true facts before me and interested me to read more.
    This is very nicely done.
    Good luck in the contest
    ~Pandy

    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      July 11
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      Thanks Pandy Fangirl

      and for your honesty...
      You know, sometimes I think different things hit us more square on than others. Glad it kept you interested.

      All the best

      Sol

  • Sandra R Reynolds silver member
    July 11
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    Great form and good flow. Much to think about very deep.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    July 11

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    Excellence

    You speak with a softness and a truth of a life so loved and have the understanding of the world about them . Bravo


  • monstruo
    July 11
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    excellent Sol. Happy you suggested this to me. Very relevant. I shall ponder this.


  • hollowriver
    July 9

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    absoulutly beautful...I am book marking this one.. a lovely pen write but the style and hard to truh meaning i loved the most

  • solo wisp gold member
    July 8

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    Truly admirable your words ... they carry such emotion, to give voice to truth's echo. As one said below, profound .. I'd include enlightening as well.


  • Roaddog Wolf gold member
    July 8

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    some very profound and heartfelt feelings to read in this piece and it speaks largely with an important point of view and message very good write

    Good luck in the contest


  • Rose Angel gold member
    July 8

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    Arms wide open, so accepting in thought and word of others..Love is expressed here in full measure..Beauty all through this write! Heartwarming, comforting..And your form is lovely as well! Bravo!


  • Woodchuck4400 silver member
    July 8
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    Very inspirational. It is also a visual treat.


  • Talking Toni gold member
    July 8

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    Very Inspiring!!!!!

    This is a reflection of the inner self to me at least. You are a man of great intelect no doubt, a great writer presenting this view.Your wods show the intimate relationship you have with God from the start in "smoking a cigarette with God",this shows how at ease with him you are and how thorugh your life he has made know to you how you are his child. Very encouraging and uplifting piece yo have penned here!!! Thanks for sharing!!!~~Toni~~


  • Arkbear gold member
    July 8

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    Hey Sol...I love the candle of Hope format which this write seemed to manefest.....also.....there have been some insightful comments left on your write, but I want to leave you with some words to inspire.....penned, by a great man........these words spoken are words of truth and love.....I shall ever live by them ~

    >>>>>

     

    God bless you Sol, always,

     

    Bear ~

     

    I reflect

    on the days

    already looked after

    the wonder indeed that I'm still here and alive

    that things aren't and haven't been so bad

    in outside affairs maybe

    but inside I am still His

    And in this remembrance

    He makes Himself mine

     

     


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      July 8

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      I feel lost for words to express how I am moved by your comment...

      Please know that it is due to a great respect and admiration I feel towards you that makes me receive this in this way.

      You are a very great friend to have Bear.

      Sol

  • Lucy. gold member
    July 6

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    I love this! There are so many favourite lines in here, I don't think I can point them all out. Here's a few;

    He kneels me with intended devotion (love the thought that 'He kneels me')

    There is nothing in this life
    which can't be transformed in an instant

    You are what you believe you are
    and become what you believe

    to hold on to and be held by forever

    Wonderfully insightful and encouraging write. The perfect beginning, middle and end, all in the right order. Very accessible to most people to read, I think, and gain something from it. I really, really love it.


    Technical bits;

    line 7 - is that meant to be 'too impossible'? If not, I'm not sure I get the meaning.

    I love the form, especially the first two stanzas. It seems though that you thought about it more at the beginning than you did at the end. Also, it appears you've started off with no punctuation and then later used commas. If you're not going to avoid commas then I think this line needs one after 'limitations'. "We already have our own limitations why adopt any more"

    Why I'm all of a sudden giving you a technical review is beyond me but there you have it anyway.

    I think this is a wonderful take on the prompt and you've written it brilliantly. X X

    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      July 7
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      Thanks so much for your so very generous comment...

      I'd have had no idea you would like this so much! Have made some corrections and you were quite right on all apart from the 'to' part, which is intended as in 'brought to' this point.


      X X

  • rhondasail
    July 6

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    There is a strength in your own soul, my friend, that rings from these inspiring words. There is one truth that visits all, however, and that is death. A doorway, to my way of thinking, that opens another aspect of our existence. Though this is a write seeming to encourage all to protect 'this' life, I can see an ever-extending flow of encouragement even to those who 'fall'(there is no dogma here, you are your own Truth) here in this time, but rise again to 'kneel to the Real' in the future time...just me, perhaps. I love this piece, and I wish you the very best in this contest. Peace always, Rhonda


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      July 7
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      Thank you so much Rhonda

      I can't possibly know how effective this approach would be towards someone, in a condition I have only felt and stared at briefly. I'm very glad you feel there is value here.

      Peace upon you, also
      Sol

  • Gwenevere
    July 6

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    As you sit and have that cigarette, you think and in thinking you reach conclusions.Whether you feel they are (god)given or your own deductions I do not know.All I know is that I have been given answers at the most desperste times and they haven't come from me.


    • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
      July 7
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      Thank you Ros

      ... It is the same for me, in that I hope and feel that I haven't expressed anything, outside truth or inevitable conclusions from the same.
      And yes, the best always it seems, comes from an 'expansiveness' larger than our 'small self's', which I believe is our real Self and not separate from 'God'.

      Sol

  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    July 6
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    Yes... I think I see your point.
    I was aware of it reading a little up beat as something to address potential suicide with. I have to admit that I've responded with my own thoughts on how I have 'turned' in darkest moments.
    Isn't it that if someone is 'unhappy' or 'suffering greatly' that it will always be in connection to a relative 'image' of comfort which they feel deprived of? A relative condition which proves an awareness of there being another possibility, which is being begged for, if we new how to beg for it.
    I wonder, if there is no longer an essential inclination present to 'reach' for anything, is there anything anyone else could do to help anyway? I don't know the answers to this, all I know of is the existence of real power in the ability to choose how we relate to things. For me to much a prison eventually makes me rebel with a 'no' to my own oppression to myself and insisting on that which is better.

    Nothing to forgive... I am not a psychologist or expert in this, I felt the best I could offer was how I would/have stood.

    You have made me think again, which is good and maybe I could address this by going to meet a suicidal condition more than I have done...

    Mmmm... wonder if I could enter two, if I did I think I would be far more rigourous in my approach and not so soft.

    I can't smile at present on this subject... but you know I think you're great and thank you for making me think more...

    Really!

    Sol

  • Amarige
    July 6
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    Wonderful piece Karim..and What a lovely message in your words..I enjoyed this part so much:


    'Call Him; She, It Rah or Brahmin, no matter

    give the meaning of yourself to the Greatest

    you can imagine, find certainty that it's less

    than a grain of the Real's Compassion

    You are what you believe you are

    and become what you believe'


    I agree with your words..I think we do become who we believe we are..Life had showed me so..

    I checked the contest after reading your poem..and this is very powerful entry..I am sure it will be an eye opener for so many outhere..God Bless!

    Ruby


  • Lucy. gold member
    July 6
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    ...woah...have to come back to this one... X

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