I remember falling in love
but I don’t remember when
I actually landed ,
or when the cute things
became irritating
and the thought of sleeping
felt more like a reprieve
than eight hours away from him.
It was over a bowl of cereal
when the dull throb of ‘ut oh’
began pulsating somewhere
in the bottom of my heart,
making it hard to swallow
without choking on the
sudden realization
that I couldn’t live with a man
who ate Rice Crispies
without sugar...
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....a shrink would have a field day with me
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It really is the little things that culminate...I must say I was drawn in by the first line, and enraptured to the end. You put such modern, unique real-life words into your poems, it amazes me....
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Yes he would my dear but I think you would come out on top smelling like fresh cut roses...
I love this...
☼Becky☼
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why shrink when the swollen ones far out number field days in an amazing cereal world? very cute. almost posthumously projected, but who can live without sugar? how do you remember so well? did you remember that time you forgot?
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Eduardo...
lifelong journal keeper here
I remember a few times when I forgot Love to you, Tunnel digger...Lane
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This certainly captures a life-altering moment,
or maybe just a much needed self-realization...
and wraps that in the cocoon of ordinary day.
Blue
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OMG! Who would eat Rice Crispies
without sugar? Unheard of and should
be a crime.
Love,
Amera♥
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Rice Crispies WITH sugar? EW!
I'm a Jordan's Country Crisp girl myself, with added cashews (preferably organic).
Not your greatest, but one of your goodest.
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I love this!
You do it. You hold the tiny pieces to the light and see everything through them.
Bravo.
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I would hope you'd not be turned off by the fact that I only could eat rice crispies with honey...actually I eat everything with honey instead of sugar...as for that man...
throw the idiot out LOL
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HA, Ha, ha. . . ROFL
Oh My Lady, thank you for this tonight.
By the way normalcy is so over-rated.
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Yeah-you don't get the real snap crackle and pop without sugar!!! Crackling write!!!
Love Hilly
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Rice Crispies without sugar ?!?!?!?!
That's inhuman!
I love the opening thought, should be easy for a shrink though. Just send him all your poems, by the time he's read them all, he'll be cured
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heehee
I love this Lane.
Your creativity never cease to amaze...
I love this scene, eloquently and clearly portrayed.
thanks for sharing this!!!!!!!!!!
S. P.
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Sanity ...vitamin fortified and not...comes in all sorts of packages. At least you know what ya like.
Loved it.
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*zipping lips*
nope, not a word out of me...
Paul
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Falling in love is always a breath of insanity with a the soaring flight of a hallucenogin (sp?) Landing is more like having the world come back into focus and your friends still there to let you know they care. Being in love, well, that's special and a totally different poem. Sometimes I just leave shaking my head and chuckling to myself from that warm place in the belly.
Love, Tom B.
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LOL You know this reminds me of that song by Pink where she sings 'go away come back' lol I think a shrink would find you as normal as I do Love, C
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