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Ophelia's Footsteps

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Ophelia floated in the Seine,
So as I drift in this cool lake.
She knew, as I, that this deep ache
Was one that only Death could slake!

Her story's not unlike my own,
A love once mutual, now lost.
A heart can only be so tossed...
Before the soul must pay the cost!

It won't be long now. I grow tired.
You think he'll miss the love he had?
Tell me, do you think I'm mad
To die among the lily pads?

Please tell me what you think

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  • The Moonchild
    July 13, 2008

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    You were supposed to choose a pic as your prompt. However, I do like the last line of your poem, it sums it up well and sounds beautiful.


    • Frodofan silver member
      July 13, 2008
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      Um, I did choose a picture. It is shown with the poem. Am I missing something?

  • boilerjim
    July 10, 2008
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    Interesting

    I love the last stanza. Thanks for the thoughts and words!


  • TyrannyForestFairy
    July 8, 2008

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    this is a great poem. absolutely enjoyed it. the rhyme incorporated within is awesome along with the terms used and the concept is stunning. i love the ideas conveyed, they are great. overall superb composition!


  • ourgirlFriday
    July 6, 2008
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    Wow!

    This is a wonderful poem - such a powerful write! Such connectedness and imagery...
    I'm in awe!


  • dame de la riviere
    July 5, 2008

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    bitter sweet...bitter in its theme but sweet in its executions. your diction is nicely chosen and the structure of the put is well formed. nicely penned.


  • Kelli Marie
    July 5, 2008

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    A beautiful write. Slake is a new word for me. Nice.
    "It won't be long know" Should it be now? Good luck in the contest.
    Kelli


    • Frodofan silver member
      July 5, 2008
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      Thank you and thank you for pointing out the typo.

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