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Sugar

Sugar makes the world go round
it makes everything right

It gives me a sugar rush
and makes me talk really fast

Sugar makes candy, candy

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short AND SWEEET!!!i sugar!

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  • Sailor Ptolema silver member
    July 12
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    I agree; sugar never makes things bad . A little sweetness in everyone's life would do a world of good. . I can't say this is what I'm looking for though, I think your metaphors could have been stronger, and could have been a little less literal. Thank you for entering my contest!

    and g'luck!

    ~Pt

  • BefuddledPerson
    July 7
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    NICE!


  • Noir mariposa...x
    July 7

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    Love the irony there

    Need a sugar rush acually.... chocolate!! Woo, gonna go have some now

    Short and sweet indeed, very cute and well written
    good luck with your entry!

    Claire x

  • Iloveugh
    July 6
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    Short and sweet is the words