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Forced similarity

We are one
Though it pains me
Hinders me
Impairs me
We are strangled together

Chaos strikes
when we think alike
Twice fold the trouble
Upon ourselves
when we think apart

We are one
As the Sun appears as one with the sky
As the clouds appear as one with the atmosphere
As they only appear
And our internal connection is only metaphorical

They all know how we work
They all see how we set our aspirations
They all watch as we struggle
Laugh at our endeavor
While we laugh at their separation

We are one
And it hurts me
To have to force two dissimilar minds

Have we applied too much work

So much that our uncompatibility has broken our inner machines

 

But I ponder

Of the pain you feel

For if you feel all the more happier

In this state of imprisonment with me

I will not mind

 

For we are one

And we will stay as so. 

Author notes

Pic 2 (I didn't really know what it was after writing the first two stanzas and looking at the piece title. xD But I guess including something about a dream machine is too un-inspirational. )

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  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 7, 2008

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    This was good. Just in the future, watch your repetition. Alot of times it can do more harm to the poem and it's content than anything positive.


    • Nalyn
      July 7, 2008
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      Okay.
      It's come back to haunt me!
      -flashback of repetitive poems from last year-


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    July 6, 2008
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    Great i liked this alot. Its very good and very well written. I liked it when you said "We are one
    As the Sun appears as one with the sky
    As the clouds appear as one with the atmosphere
    As they only appear
    And our internal connection is only metaphorical" good job :]