Your dazzling smile projects your very being;
Parted lips and white teeth are not all I'm seeing.
When I see you, I do not notice the clothes.
It is the aura that surrounds you that really shows.
Who you are, deep down inside your heart;
This is the person I noticed from the very start.
You’ve compared yourself to models so slim
And, then asked me what I thought of them.
Truly? They have the artificial look of new plastic,
While you exude loving kindness that is fantastic.
Although your body is certainly pleasing
And, I have engaged in some sexual teasing
I'm not enraptured with the skin of your body or face.
Instead, it’s your inner light that focuses my chase.
~ for Stef ~
Author notes
The prompt was to right about "aura". I used Stef, and the following quote for my inspiration:
The aura given out by a person or object is as much a part of them as their flesh. - Lucian Freud
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A contest entry
- EXISTENTIALISM and AURAS by Mila7.
565 points, ended July 13, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love Poems! by Peachy.
1400 points, ended July 20, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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Sounds like "she" sparkles
And for my dedication, I would like to thank the small (wait, vertically challenged?) person who wrote this for me! haha
I love it, thank you
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Woodchucks are short and fast. Sooner or later I will catch up to those long legs, even if I have to burrow the whole 1000 miles underground.
I dig you.
Mike
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A refreshing change to read a light write. Your wording was good and you conveyed your message well enough to melt her heart. Good luck and Pen on...
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Thanks. It was something I needed to do. Several of my AP friends have been running dark contests. I entered and produced dark work. I enjoyed doing something on the happy side.
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It is your inner self that attracts me! The Aura...of being, seld confident and kind to others..Wonderful poem. I'm sure she will enjoy this poem! Nicely done. ~Sie
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She is a remarkable woman. She is my constant inspiration. Her aura is something palpable. I feel it and it makes me happy.
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if you get her mind [inner light etc]....the body follows
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I am tenacious.
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instead it's your inner light that focuses my chase.
i like that line alot, good luck with the contest. -
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I am glad that you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for reading and commenting. She is a special woman.
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well written - especially loved the last two lines. i wish more people thought like you. Good luck in the contest. Love, Lane
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wow... youve made me think.. you know somehow I m starting to believe not all men look for external beauty just the ingnorant ones
its true, ture beauty is only found in the aura or what others call the soul of a person. Im not so good with all that indeed but youre message is clear and I like that.. ppl should read this poem to realize not everything that shines is gold..
great job!
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Regardless of the looks of a man or a woman, good or bad, it is what is on the inside that counts. I think that things would improve if people were rated on there sense of humor and intelligence and had to wear that on their head.
I tend to find that people that have not always been beautiful on the outside are the ones that are the prettiest on the inside. People that have always been physically beautiful often lack tolerance, humor, manners and intelligence. They remind me of inbred dogs. -
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hahahaha,
I agree, but in any case I can picture some of the people I know carrying their humor on their heads, and it would be an awesome sight.
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I am glad you liked this. Not every pretty person is shallow or vice versa. Thanks for reading and commenting.
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I agree... I was actually thinking of a guy I know who has the best sense of humor and laughs at everything, if he managed to wear it in his head, haha. And yeah the inbred dogs thing made me laugh too.
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A knowing man, the aura, the essence.
well phrased.
Aesthete
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I found the poem to be a bit of a challenge to start with. I thought of my muse and her aura lit my path.
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Great poem! It shows you great care for her, for something beyond looks, but rather, what's within. This is an amazing poem! The rhyme was extremely well done.
i like your inspirational quote very much, it has a lot of truth to it. and I loved your last stanza, where you describe auras as an inner light.
Great job and good luck in the contest!
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Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. I think that true beauty lies within, and that it is what is inside that counts. I think of Stef as a shining light. She exudes an aura.
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that is so sweet what you wrote, you should show this to her is you havn't already
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Thank you very much for your kind words. She will see this when she returns. She is very special. She has been an inspiration to me and a source of strength in my times of strife.
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