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Murdering Love's Antidote

You gave me love
              I traded it for pain

Every kiss we shared
              was met with sadness

You rescued my heart
            I crushed all of your dreams

You tried to build me up
            I always brought you down

I packed my things and left
            It broke your will to live


Author notes

" There is a difference between being a writer and being a poet."
I used 50 words in this poem (between 30-50)

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  • gypsiessoul
    September 1
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    Is this inspired by some past relationship or just a general view....Its written very well


  • BestSouthernComfort
    July 18
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    Wonderful. Very capturing of the essence of a love that wont work.

  • Nothing But No
    July 6

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    I like this a lot, your use of couplets and contrast works well for this. Nice word choice as well. Best of luck in your contest.

  • Shadow BC
    July 5

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    Great poem.

    You know! Lately I've found that poems of love, heartbreak, sorrow, and internal deaths caused by the 3, seem to be my favorite.
    This was a good poem. I usually don't 1like really short peaces, but it accomplished what it intended.