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He Had

He smiles only occasionally.
The years have not been nice to him,
he reads throughout the day
and watches the sky change and morph from his bedroom window

'take me up to the old mill yard
and leave me with a blanket by the oak.'

His hair grows thin and white,
he fashions himself a cane.
His scheduled meals bring him slowly to each night
The sun soaking through yellowed curtains awakens him each morning

He passes the time.

'take me up to the old mill yard
and leave me with a blanket by the oak'
 
The clock's song grows faster and faster
His eyelids grow heavy, his skin melts onto his brittle bones
He remembers what used to be

His smiles were occasional,
but at least he smiled.
The years passing had stolen his hair, his mobility,
but the years had given him love and children and hope
Sunsets and sunrises, he had slept under the stars
His smiles were occaisional,
but at least he had smiled.

'take me up to the old mill yard,
and leave me with a blanket by the oak'

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  • A Citys Ember
    July 8, 2008
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    i like it


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 7, 2008

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    This was good. I don't know why, but when I was reading this, I started to think of Little House on the Prairie


  • Patpowers silver member
    July 6, 2008

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    Good work.

    Very well presented work of poetry. I admire the way this was written. Touching and a bit captivating. Thanks for sharing.


  • james119
    July 5, 2008

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    I am very fond of this entry


    As this contests starts, I can see there will likely be more points and shiny cups.