In ways I can not fathom
~I love you
A mystery with no explaintion
~I love you
My tears fall when you ache
~I love you
Mindful to mere facial language
~I love you
My pleasure if found in your desires
~I love you
There is no you or I, only "us"
~I love you
Author notes
~ voodoo ink ~
OPTION 3:
~Poem Exert~
"I love you without knowing how, or when, or from where.
I love you straightforwardly, without complexities or pride;
so I love you because I know no other way
than this: where I does not exist, nor you,
so close that your hand on my chest is my hand,
so close that your eyes close as I fall asleep."
Taken from: 'Sonnet XVII' © Pablo Neruda
Photo credit: www.vibride.com/images/article/1/512.jpg
A contest entry
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1700 points, ended July 22, 16 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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A very sweet and endearing take on the inspirational exert. A pure essence of love, plain, and simple amongst such a complex notion...
"In ways I can not fathom
~I love you"
.. I just love that, excellent breath to begin ..
Well penned and truly thoughtful. Best wishes in the contest!
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So small of a write with so much inside... This is so sweet and the love is so handfelt in this! I just love your wording and the form you built this in. Very simple but very elegant and beautiful.
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a nice personal touch inspired by Neruda's work. really enjoyed the structure of the piece and the spell of responding to the mystery of love. thanks.
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Simply beautiful and heartfelt.
I love the emotion and sincerity in
this write. Wonderful work bringing
this prompt to life through your words
my friend! All the best to you with
this one in the contest and thanks a lot
for sharing it here!
Jeremy0826
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awwwwww
awesome hun-- so happy you chose the Neruda exerpt - I love him!!! Obviously his words touched you as well!?
this is beautifully stated....
thank you for entering & best of luck!!!
Tasha
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Thank you...This is a different muse to my darker things, that I have been accustomed to writing...I might be getting softer in my older days...
~Fun contest and have fun judging...
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also forgot to mention -- nice work on changing the style of how you normally write as well
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