If right now I were to walk away
Would you follow me to the [dark] corners of my mind
Sweep me off my feet, but don't say a thing
Let me love you with every piece of my heart
I've been wanting to hide, but I've lost my will to try
I'll let our vulnerable hearts .:collide:.
I'm waiting;;
...Anticipating
You've become the C.O.L.O.R of my life
A perfection at making me smile, without having to try
You hold all the meaning as of why
My emotions filter so clearly--
Your affection pouring out of your intense eyes
Don't make me wait a second longer
Be the C.O.L.O.R of my life
& don't let me [go]
Entangle me with an endless bliss
So I feel like I could nearly fly
Crudely knowing the feeling won't last forever
You're all I really need tonight
I've been wanting to run, but I'm still holding on
You make me s.m.i.l.e when I don't want to
I'm waiting;;
...Anticipating
♥You are the C.O.L.O.R of my life♥
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Not the best, but idk. I might like it
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A contest entry
- Color my World. by Eyes Wide Shut.
681 points, ended July 31, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
pleassse tell me what you think :]
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This was simply AMAZING!
omgsh...this is freakin' awesome
your creativity really shines through with this one
A+ Mandy
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I like how this flows so well but without all the cheesy rhyming. Ha. I love the color format too. It's so funky. This is how love or at least something close to it should be. But, people always say that you shouldn't have your head in the clouds so much when you are in love or are even just dating someone. At least, thats what I was taught. What is the fun in that?
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love love love the layout of this piece..it makes me go awww and it's sweet
...ahem well anyways..this is a very and yes I mean vERY lovely poem just fill with warmth and tenderness..for some reason it's hard for me to come up with a love poem just heartbreak I'm good at..can't seems to express myself even though I've been in those situations many times..COLORFUL WRITE!!!!
Keep Penning!!!
Lieu
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Really Good
OMG YOUR WRITING IS SO AMAZING! My favorite part was were you say I've been wanting to run, but I'm still holding on.. I know how that is to want to let go but you cant as much as you want to something is holding you back and everytime you try to let go somthing happens and he or she always finds there way back? Am i hitting this at all? Lol Really really good write! Keep it up!
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Thank you
& yes, you pretty much hit it dead on. haha♥
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wow. amazing.
"My emotions filter so clearly--
Your affection pouring out of your intense eyes
Don't make me wait a second longer
Be the C.O.L.O.R of my life
& don't let me [go]"
that part just totally stunned me.
you're an amazing writer.
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REALLY LIKE IT
The structure in this MAKES this poem! It's like light dirty pretty, but so colourful. Each colour represents the emotion it is so well in this! Structure, layout, placement; that's the strongest part about this piece. Sometimes being in love makes you feel all these colours at once! Enjoyable read but even better structure! 8/10! -
This really seems to convey a lot of emotions I'm feeling. Especially; I've been wanting to run, but I'm still holding on
You make me s.m.i.l.e when I don't want to.
Good job, babes. Thank you for entering!!!
♥loveyou.
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