I quit your sick game of objectifying me
deny the subtle manipulation
even more the blatant lies
slash your postmodern canvases of coersion
burn to the ground institutions of dehumanizing deception
created by your cyber space
virtual time
after all
I pay for this with my life
you are ruled by your triumphs
desperate slave to defeats
I'm at my best when I reduce you to digital ash
smear your remains across the forehead of my renunciation
only this moment is real
and I'm taking it with me
there's no past or future here so I'll just say
my best friend is emailing you a photo of my corpse
take notice of the defiant frozen smile
cold lips mocking these temporary traces in words
Please tell me what you think
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What a statement!
WOW! This one's over the top! The last line: "cold lips mocking these temporary traces in words" -- is out of this world! I don't know whether this poem is serious about death or just using as a metaphor! From the outset, this poem seems like a takeoff on a serious dark poem. But, towards the end I start to think it is seriously dark. InterEsting twist and great job, my friend! BY THE WAY CHECKED OUT YOUR WEBSITE AND I'M VERY IMPRESSED! TYING BUSINESS IN WITH PROFESSIONAL PLEASURES IS MOST UNCOMMON!
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Powerful Poem!
Love the title!
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Sad subject full of raw emotions and deep meaning...heart get broken and sometime we have to walk away...strong and powerful ending, with lovely word choice...well done!
Best,
mystic
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Heavy subject matter. I like "digital ash" as an image.
I'm finding it hard to read without punctuation, but it's certainly flowing whilst being heavily broken into points of a narrative.
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Incredibly powerful renunciation. I enjoyed the poem. The choice of words clearly portrays the feelings presented.
Mike
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"take notice of the defiant frozen smile
cold lips mocking these temporary traces in words"
Wonderful! I read through it twice and have decided I love it
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Luvit!
ruled by triumphs, slave to defeats
Very dense work, my friend. I'll be back to revisit this one.
"After all, I pay for this with my life."
Indeed.
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