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Spiders

They creep down the spine, 
burning intensely in acid,
poisoning the thoughts,
vision blurs until only can see nightmare canvas.

Not possessed of legs or body
these are arachnids of the tongue,
the words that kill the spirit 
and destroy one's hopes,
criticism's tarantulas
biting with their fangs
that drain passion from the blood,
leave me feeble and crippled 
of any dream I once thought would be my tomorrow.

It is the hate sent by flaming darts
strike the heart 
with black widow toxins
often seeping into old wounds
until they erupt in agony
over some previous pain.

Building their webs within my head,
which traps every speck of suggestion
riding any breath 
filled with the dust that clogs esteem's flow.

Kryptonite of abuse and bias
long ago irradiating my feeling's frail membrane
so the tiniest crawling  insult
brings waves of angst
from so many former bites.

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Prompt: My Kryptonite

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  • Rheea gold member
    July 19

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    This I will never forget. Once you read something that hits your heart like this has mine and I am sure many others. I do not need a copy of it. It makes me cry and makes me careful with my two little grand daughters as I was with my daughter not to do this to them. You simply took my breath away.

    • Sagerider
      July 19
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      When you wake and your mouth tastes bad

      Because there is no source of water in your bedroom the spiders have to slip down at night and drink out of the corner of your mouth. Sometimes they have to crawl inside to get a good drink and well......how many spiders do you think we eat in a lifetime. LULU

      • Rheea gold member
        July 19
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        spiders I am not afraid any more... mostly I am not lulu
  • Ha! Loving the Spider theme here, so eerie, and a bit spooky/dark. Makes me feel like RUNNING away! In hopes of never getting bit by your kryptonite spyders Great write dear - very best of luck

  • at first i wasn't sure if i wanted to read this... spiders just scare me... but wow... the hurt that i have felt before from words said for that purpose... that is really even scarier to go through...
    REALLY GREAT!


  • maralisa silver member
    July 6
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    criticism's tarantulas biting with their fangs that drain passion from the blood,leave me feeble and crippled with black widow toxins often seeping into old woundsso the tiniest crawling insult brings waves of angst from so many former bites.wonderful poem good luck in the contest

  • Oh wow! This is just amazing. What an awesome metaphor you have used with such brilliance. It sounds a lot like depression when those triggers send you off the planet!
    All the best with this wonderful piece
    Gaylene


  • Rheea gold member
    July 5
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    This sent me to my knees penman..


  • Desire gold member
    July 5

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    Oh My~

    Excellent take on the prompt~ Wonderful weaving of words and Love the lines:
    criticism's tarantulas
    biting with their fangs
    and
    Kryptonite of abuse and bias

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweetness
    Best wishes too
    and my Love & Light~ Desire~*~


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