he cannot roll poetry
he stumbles over
ands
&
thes
but my waltz
of voice and paper
go limp
when his arms
speak
A contest entry
- Try this... or not by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended July 6, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I could gush, but I won't.
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I could adore you even more, but I don't think it's possible.
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Wow, nice little love poem. Not corny at all! Excellent at that...
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congratulations, this is a great little evokative poem, nicely done!
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Thank you.
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Congrats on the gold, this is a truly great poem! I enjoyed reading this one!
Thanks for sharing and keep on writing!
Annie
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YAY! See, this just proves that it's not impossible to write 10 lines without adjectives. Heck, you could even enter this in a 30 words or less contest. LOL And people thought this was hard. psh
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it's nothing more than a joint
tongue glued
saliva textured
the paradox of moist turned smoke
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Awesome! You don't need no stinkin' adjectives!
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ROFL!!
Damn straight! She said I couldn't do it so I sure showed her!
Thanks, m'kittymeow...you're sweeter than a bowlful of sugar.
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what a fascinating piece!!! I really love this!!
~all the best in the contest!!
Sailor Ptolema 
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Succinct...you always amaze me Ma'am.
Thanks for sharing your gift.
HENSLEY
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of course he does... and the girl's getting wed too, ain't that just the bee's knees ...
grand stuff this Darcy
Gilly.x
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I know! I can't believe I'm gettin' hitched! lol Woot! And my granmomma told me she had to strap a sucker around my neck to get the boys to play with me!
Thanks, Miz Gilly...I can only hope my man is as grand as your own.
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i think this may be my favorite by you..
and that is saying alot because
you are
and have been one of my favorites on this site.
m
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