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Fire

Fire combined
To one girl
Who can controll
IT!!!


Waiting through the night
Ready and waiting
She burns
At the heart of the rose.

A contest entry

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  • DawnKestrel
    July 8, 2008

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    Nice job!
    Keep up the good work!


  • LionessK
    July 6, 2008

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    welcome to allpoetry

    Good job with this... I think you have found adequate words for the background. I especially like the ending lines. Thank you for sharing.
    keep writing on.


    ~Kristy


  • xxFallenDreamsxx
    July 5, 2008
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    No applause, make it longer, more descriptive

    • Waterspirit
      July 7, 2008
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      Maybe i want it short but you have your own opinion and I have mine. No offence. Thank for comment


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    July 5, 2008
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    Great i liked this alot. Very good. :]


  • Miss Chievous
    July 5, 2008
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    This is Kewl!I like the red
    Good luck!

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