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Being Young

Those weary eyes tell
Much more than a
Boring school tale

 

Being caring isn't a chore
It comes as naturally as a
Genuine laugh; like family

Words can make or break
How people see you.
So don't follow the rules
Because they're meant to be
Broken, not spoken

Being a senior is hard-work;
Expectant young ones want to see
You lead them to a bright future

Recess, a storytelling session;
Trying to solve the
Mind-boggling equation
Of friendship & trust

Arguments flare up
So easily between friends,
But letters search softly
For sincere forgiveness

Cursing behind people's backs

A hug to seal a sisterly promise

Anger flitting through strained eyes

The beautiful life of being young

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being young...x

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  • checkmate
    July 18, 2008

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    oh my. that's exactly how I felt when I read your piece. I've missed your work so much dear.

    this paints such beautiful imagery. the truth in this is great- I love personal poems because they are the best kind, because I can't help not falling in love with them. the feeling of being young was captured so well. great work here.

    as critique- hmm, well. your first few words seemed to stumble but the best part is that it all changed by the time I reached 3rd stanza. and after that, it was a smooth lovely beautiful piece o truth, love and poetry. awesome work.

    ♥checkmate♥


  • transit
    July 11, 2008

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    wow

    I think you have described perfectly what school really is about. I found myself thinking of school and everything related to it penned beautifully in this poem.

    The flow is good and I ma not sure if you noticed but "session" and "equation" rhyme. beautiful poem. good luck!!

    transit~


  • gettingoutofme
    July 10, 2008
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    THis is a great poem and it really it a nice one to read. Good luck in my contest.