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My Love

The night wind whirls in the night and sings,
your caresses enfold me, like climbing
vines on melancholy walls.

I celebrate you, my beauty;
if I look at the crystal moon,
everything carries me to you.

I like you calm, as if you were distant,
you are a moaning, a butterfly's cooing.

Suddenly
my feet touch your feet and my mouth your lips;
you have grown.

We are complete like a single river,
like a single grain of sand.
So you and I made this heavenly outcome,
the mind and love lie naked in this house.

Do not take from me your laughter;
laugh at the night,
at the day, at the moon.

But my words become stained with your love.
You occupy everything, you occupy everything.

Author notes

Form-Cento - The Five Senses (My first!)

Poet - Pablo Neruda
Titles-
Tonight I Can Write The Saddest Lines - line 4
Love - lines 15/16
Ode To A Naked beauty - line 3
If You Forget Me - lines 5/11
I like you calm, as if you were absent - lines 9/10
In You The Earth - lines 12/14/15
Potter - lines 15/16
Luminous mind, bright devil - lines 7/8
Your Laughter - lines 3/34/35
So that you will hear me - lines 25/26

Poetic Form: Cento

From the Latin word for "patchwork," the cento is a poetic form made up of lines from poems by other poets. Though poets often borrow lines from other writers and mix them in with their own, a true cento is composed entirely of lines from other sources.

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  • Little Feather Greeters member
    July 10

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    Thank you for your entry

    I really can pick out each of the senses in this poem. I love the flow of it and the format. All the senses of love is what this poem brings to mind.

    Excellent job on the form. Well done following the prompt.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy

  • penman gold member
    July 6
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    Beautiful

    Such an amazing write. And fantastic use of the form. Best of luck in the contest.


  • marlene47 silver member
    July 6

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    I like this Pablo Neruda cento... with your sense selections. Some great sense lines - singing wind, enfolding caresses, looking at the moon, a moaning, a butterfly's cooing (very cool), the touching feet and lips, the laughing, stained words and her presence in everything.
    A evidence gathering of the proof of love.
    Marlene

  • The Poetic Angel gold member
    July 6

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    brill job with you first cento mum i have oftern thought of tryin this form but aint brave nuff lol

    good luck in the contest

    xxx cheeky xxx