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imsomnia

5am
wide awake
the neighbours are all dead

i heard the screams
watch the blood
splatter window seals

insomnia is my curse
my nightmares turn to real
6am still awake

 

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  • Darkwell
    July 9, 2008
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    this is pretty creative about the place between dreams an reality an creative hurts you in this contest, poo deduction for that its clever. the rhymes arent consistent though an the meter is off too so you get poo for that but pretty much this poem works. on a scale of 1-10, 10 bein the worse poem ever

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  • Dalaney gold member
    July 6, 2008

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    blink blink...okay, this is a rather different approach. i suggest you wear a bit of garlic darling love, lane