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My Rebirth

I heard God's voice call out to me
to follow Him, my soul to free,
I felt so lonely deep inside
I knew He'd surely be my guide
and silently I sent my plea.

I knelt in prayer on bended knee
and suddenly my eyes could see,
I knew forever I'd abide
I heard God's voice.

Within His love I'll have the key
and soon eternity I'll see,
He'll always be right by my side
and for my soul He shall provide.
I praise the Lord, my soul to see
I heard God's voice.

Author notes

Poetic Form: Rondeau - Prompt - Faith (my first!)
The rondeau’s form is not difficult to recognize: as it is known and practiced today, it is composed of fifteen lines, eight to ten syllables each, divided stanzaically into a quintet, a quatrain, and a sestet. The rentrement consists of the first few words or the entire first line of the first stanza, and it recurs as the last line of both the second and third stanzas. Two rhymes guide the music of the rondeau, whose rhyme scheme is as follows (R representing the refrain): aabba aabR aabbaR.

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  • Little Feather Greeters member
    July 23

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    Thank you for your entry

    Gaylene, it pleases me greatly to see you continue to enter these form contests. Your faith is very apparent and strong in this poem and I love the love you show for the Lord in this. My one suggestion is in the second stanza, instead of 'my life could see' perhaps 'my eyes could see'

    The form we well done and the refrain line was perfect for this poem. We all seek to hear His voice and to know Him. Good rhythm and flow.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy

    PS I have opened a group for those who want to learn more of form and work on their poetry. I would love for you to join. It is called the Poets Walk and you can find a link to the application page on my author page.

  • PerVirtuous gold member
    July 20
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    Artfully rhymed. A nice entry.

  • PerVirtuous gold member
    July 20
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    Artfully rhymed. A nice entry.


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    July 5

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    Very nicely done. The rondeau is executed well and this faith story is beautiful. I hope your readers willl be encouraged to follow the example of this one!


  • Rovingone gold member
    July 5
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    A wonderful presentation of the style and praise for God.


  • PussyCat
    July 5
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    Beautiful!!! I felt so good after reading this.

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