You are the sunrise
To my blackened skies
Something showing me
That everything’s alright
You are expression
To my blank face
You ease my depression
With a pencil you erase
And I sit here smiling
Knowing that you
Are standing there loving me
As much as you do
You are a prism
That lets through the sun
My secret visions
Never to be undone
And I sit here smiling
Knowing that you
Are standing there loving me
As much as you do
You are a rowboat
On my way to heaven
You leave me love notes
For my heart to hold
You have been an angel to me
Since you’ve come in my life
A place of great safety
And some kind of belief
Author notes
This poem is now a song in my musical Closing In On Forever to be produced in December 08.
A contest entry
- .:LOVE:. by chore2chore.
330 points, ended July 16, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hopeless Romantics by N.W. Clerk.
1200 points, ended September 6, 2008, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-writes, new poems, Anything by Hello...No.One.Home.
525 points, ended September 24, 2008, 104 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
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Exceptional
Wow you are producing a musical that is excellent. I am studying musical theatre at college at the moment and I also have a Btec national diploma in Performing Arts. Anyway back to your poem or lyrics they are really great you seem to be able to flow so well and I can see how this might sound when it is sung. I love the way you use emotion and open your heart in every poem that you write. I think the words are delightful and I would love to hear about how your show goes. With your strength and determination I am sure it will be a great success.
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"And I sit here smiling
Knowing that you
Are standing there loving me
As much as you do "
This is so beautiful overall, but especially that verse. Where are you putting on your musical? Will you be recording it? Would love to hear the soundtrack
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loved the flow
vanna -
It sounds like your madly in love and you swept my along for the ride.
A deliteful write and I wish you all the best in the contest.
Rose -
An excellent poem of contrasts and connections you have going on here and I felt they worked really well. I found the opening particularly striking, 'You are the sunrise/to my blackened skies' is incredibly powerful. The feelings of the poetic voice towards its subject really sear across the screen with the intensity and honesty. Thanks for sharing.
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An uplifting poem!
The rhyme is good, once again it starts to peter out towards the end. But the over all flow is nice!
Keep on penning!
Regards,
Jennifer
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Great poem.....! I like it...
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