The night diffuses into a bright day;
Traffic buzzes down through the streets.
Those flowers in the bed so fresh so bright;
And here I am with a motor-bike.
An idle kick, the oil spurts up to the chambers;
Near by water tickles down through the tap.
I slide into position and turn on the ignition;
A dog begins to bark rapidly.
A hard kick, and the engine starts to throb;
Nature has lost its glee.
I shift into gear and wheels begin to turn,
Off I go and the world moves with me.
A contest entry
- Notice the unnoticed by Dienush.
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thankyou for your entry, good luck in the contest.
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thank you so much for entering. Since the contest is for rhyme I feel that the entries should have their strength in that area and I am sorry but I found true rhyme only in the end ...
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I find the concept of this very interesting, although the phrasing could probably have been more original. especially in the last stanza, I'm under the impression that you speak of both good and bad about riding a motorcycle, and that is more insightful than your usual poem on any given theme. One typo I found: "buzz's" should be "buzzes". Anyway, I like the juxtaposition between nature elements and machine elements. This says a lot. Thanks for your entry.
~Diana
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