There are a few things that I need to say
I bid you farewell, this has been my last day
With all my heart I love you so
And I’m writing this, because you need to know
Know that it’s not your fault I’m gone
I’ve been here already, for way too long
There was nothing more I had to give
Not a reason left, for me to live
It’s too late, my time has come
There is nothing more for me to become
My time’s run out, I want it to end
So now my final words I send
I won’t be here tomorrow, please carry on
My race is over, my battle’s won
I have to go, so my soul can be free
To spare this life, of the monstrosity that is me
I don’t deserve to see the light
I welcome the oncoming, never-ending night
On day perhaps you’ll understand
That this is not what I had planned
But I will die, and have eternal youth
I have to leave you behind, and face the truth
This life was never meant for me
What I am, is not what I wanted to be
There might be something more out there
If there isn’t, I really don’t care
I cant stand this life anymore
It’s polluting my heart, to the very core
I need it to stop, I need it to end
So now I say, goodbye my friend.
Thank you for being there for me
Thank you for helping me to be free
I’m sorry it has to end this way
But this is the price, I have to pay
I hope and pray that one day you’ll see
Just how much you meant to me.
I know it hurts, but there is no other way
I simply cannot bear to stay
So this is it, my final goodbye..
I love you so much..
… Please don’t cry.
Author notes
Option Number 8.
A contest entry
- Options, Options, Options and PW allowed! by PonyPride.
950 points, ended September 10, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this is a great poem, but the feelings i have are do to what he did to me. its almost undescribable the feelings i have because of him. i never knew someone can make another person feel this horrible. i would have rather him puch and kick me umtil an inch of life. love the poem......great work!!!!
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Good contest entry. You have kept the rhyme scheme going throughout, & it scans very well. Quite moving. I hope this isn't an insult, but it reminds me of some of Charlotte Bronte's poems.
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Emotion sparked
You expressed feelings of emotion well in this piece, It was insightfully a cool read. Well done -
This was so heartfelt. I nearly cried
But that's good! It means that you can portray emotion. I loved the last lines, it made the poem go out wiht a bang.
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there seems to be a theme of this going around. guess theres too much heartbreak out there but you might end up one of the fortunate ones.
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I love the way you expressed your heartbreak, it's a beautiful poem with a lovely flow
Great write!
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Liked the flow of these lines, the rhythm and rhyme you have used here. GOod take on Option #8. Heartwrenching reading these words. Just what would one say as they were dieing? Sentiments well expressed here.
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This is a heartwrenching poem - it is very well written, the flow and rhythm are well done and add impact to your words (which were strong to start with anyway)... This makes me wonder about the people behind the story - it has just enough information for it to lend itself to many different interpretations of the backstory - and I think that it is a stronger poem for it... I imagine it being said out lous with a heavy voice -
I hope everything is alright...
Take care
Polly
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Beautifully writeb but very sad.
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