Addictive poison flowing through my body
Toxic venom destructively numbing my mind
The pain of the past quickly blowing away
But the loss of memory has made me blind.
The toxin has infected my soul
In exchange of forgetting the past
Forgetting everything, forgetting I live
Just wishing to breathe my very last
I sincerely wish I couldn't remember
Those memories full of excruciating pain
But they are forever and unforgettable
And that's why I'm here, in front of this train.
Author notes
I don't really feel like this, it just came to mind.
A contest entry
- Wanting to forget by City-of-Angels.
600 points, ended July 5, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything Goes....Or Does It? by lowercase prelude.
1500 points, ended July 8, 2008, 62 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want your darkest of dark poetry. by Chelse-Oh.
950 points, ended November 21, 2008, 29 entries
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what do you think?
Comments
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I liked the beginning of this piece and the word choice adds a very nice touch. Great job. Thanks for entering. ~Chelsey
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I could feel empathy from this one and the ending was great
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hm very unique write. I really like the first stanza. Great use of imagery in here also. I wasn't a huge fan of the ending but it has a lot of potential. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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