We sprinkled pepper on our eggs
and greedy eyes devoured
hand's graceful movements
Memories of this moment
when it's existence hinged
solely on shared words
and vivid imaginations
Now strikingly present,
every sense is drenched in
the heady aroma of this instant
We sprinkle pepper on our eggs
and I'm intoxicated
with you
Author notes
Contest prompt: Begin with 'we sprinkled pepper on our eggs'
A contest entry
- It Begins With... by Dalaney.
825 points, ended July 7, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Aww I love your imagined moments..your imagery in this piece is wonderful..Lucy
'Memories of this moment
when it's existence hinged
solely on shared words
and vivid imaginations'
I loved that part very much..you got lovely talent my friend..keep it up
Ruby
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Thank you....they're my favourite lines too.
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you are most welcome dear
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you have such a beautiful imagination....well done
Great poem!
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Wonderful..
slightly distant in the beginning, but very personal in those last lines..
I love the word intoxicated
best of luck
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...intoxicated...I do too.
Thank you
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This is brilliant. Your second stanza and the last two lines of your poem are really strong. This is one of those texture pieces that invigorates as well as captures. Poetry like this I always read and must admit, get a little hungry, even if it was not intentional. I love the whole piece as a metaphor. Nothing to mention critique wise. I like this. Very much so.
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Thank you! I love you visiting me
Did you scroll down and see your 'emeralds' poetic response to this?
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He is a poetic genius. I didn't see that, but thank you for telling me. I love your stuff. Thank you for writing.
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This makes me hungry...in all sorts of ways...you emote so perfectly the physical reactions to a persons presence that you hunger for...please pass the salt...LOL...Love this one too! Peace, Rhonda
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Thank you, your comments are always so insightful.
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How on earth did you get that from the prompt?
Love it!! Very creative indeed of you hun!
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lol, thanks. I have no idea...that prompt stood out to me straight away and I knew I had this in my head for it. (Easy to come up with because it IS an imagined moment in my head )
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This would be a beautiful way to start any day. Pass the pepper?
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Wouldn't it just? Thank you
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Very clever write from this prompt!! I keep wanting to call you Lucy, even though I know you changed your name...it's too hard to say, temporarily-this all the time, and temp sounds too much like work...how about I still say Lucy! Thanks for all your encouragement, and I love your poem!
faith
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Thank you And I'd love for you to continue to call me Lucy.
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this is a delight - Thank you so very much for introducing me to your poetry. Love, Lane
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Interesting write hun! I kept thinking about two people sharing a special moment together as they are about to head off to work, or perhaps just lounging around on a lazy weekend. But just being able to be there together, that nothing else matters until the dishes are cleared. Love this!♥
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Breakfast
We sprinkled pepper on our eggs,
were they curried or fried?
and greedy eyes devoured each other
hand's graceful movements sighed.
Memories of this moment shared
when it's existence hinged on trust
solely on shared words to feeling
and vivid imaginations to be us.
Now strikingly present, beauty,
every sense is drenched from above
the heady aroma of this instant
complete in living love.
We sprinkle pepper on our eggs
forget ourselves in sneezing
and I'm intoxicated
with you
and me
until our hearts just end up squealing. X
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I LOVE IT!!! X
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I somehow still remember this so very well.
love
Sol X X
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spicy... and warming and just like a morning should be, perfection is found in the cooking of eggs
fried or boiled or even poached slow.. eggs is eggs.. up and easy
nicely done you
Gilly.xxxx
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