-You've started with nothing
=I started with dignity
-You've grown to be low
=I've grown the way I want to be
-You've been so unwanted
=I want myself. That's all I need.
-You're nothing higher than dirt
=To my Lord.
-You have no meaning here
=My meaning is to live.
-No one needs you here.
=Of what matter are they to me, when I have no matter to them?
-You need to end.
=You need to let me be.
-Why must you live life in such a way?
=Mistakes cannot be contained.
-You're lonely.
=And happy.
-You're poor.
=And happy.
-You could be more
=With feelings less.
-Why haven't you thrown away your life yet?
=I shall never throw away my life until I have nothing but my life to throw away.
-What do you have
=I have hope.
It's time you had some, too.
Author notes
Argument between two people.
-'s first person
='s other person.
Not really my best, but if you like it, and relate to it, the opinion is all yours.
A contest entry
- Protect Life by Arkbear.
3300 points, ended July 16, 2008, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Honesty is my future's savior
Comments
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This is very powerful. I read it as an internal battle - the mind remembering the hurtful words said to us and then my spirit-man rising up and speaking the truth.
Very well done and very realistic.
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Thrown
This piece tugged hard at my Spirit, I read Your words several times and I Love how You presented this for You made very Strong points which I imagine others could relate to especially with the line: You're poor yet response: And happy- Bravo!! I'm Blessed You are here
Excellent Voice to Inspire
Powerful images You have brought forth
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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This is very deep and powerful. I like the little argumenty thing you had going on! The = had some good stuff to say! I think if a suicidal person read this it might actually turn them around! Just one suggestion, I think it was a bit too "aggresive," As the others said it, but in my own words I think you could've made it a bit softer.
Nice write, good luck in the contest.
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Yeah, writer's block sucks when you're going to write for a contest. xD
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it is a great way to express sch a deep feeling. Life is precious.
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Good conversation here
Hope and despare I agree with the one for life and hope and so trying to distill this hope in another for everyday of life is a lesson learned to make us the best we can be . Often the lessons we learn arent ones we chose to live through but as you grow older you become the captain of your soul so get your ship in order and sail it to the land of hope love and peace and never look back for you are the boss now of your happiness let it be all you wanted it to be and know peace
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a little to agressive but it did tie up good in the end
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a little agressive stand but often agressive is equally as strong and often what is needed to make some of us think, good write
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I love the style .. also enjoy your positive attitude. Definitely good to see some of the younger ones on AP participating in this contest. You've written magnificently .. yes.
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This is a very interesting poem. The dialogue is a nice approach. I like the 'other person's' perspective alot.
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This exposed discourse of interior question answer is a very insightful and clever way, a direct way, to address a need. For some they may find different questions and answers but the principle is the same. I believe every real question has a real answer.
Very well done, I am impressed.
Are you really 12 years old?!
Sol
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Thank you, much appreciated.
And yes. My age is true.
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... Then I am even more impressed at the wisdom you have shown here and I will add you to my favourites list so I can keep up with what else you come up with.
Very well done and good luck in this contest, I believe that this is one of the best writes in it I have read so far!!!
Sol
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Thank you, and good luck to you, too!
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A Good...........
Presentation of both sides. One positive, the other negative. The strong one will do all necessary to survive the weaker ne requiring encouragment, love, and inspiration tokeep on living for whatever circumstance that has brought them to this place of desparation and darkness. Very nice job on presenting both sides. Thanks for sharing!!!~~Toni~~
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I had to read this to my Partner sitting at the other computor here in the office.......we are very proud of you :)
You are such a gift to those who will read your words......never give up that Hope.....it's the best gift from God ever!!!!
Bless you for taking the time to enter something for the young people, and the young at heart :)
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Awww inspirational in a way ^^ It does shout out a very strong message. Put a smile on my dile hehe
Good luck with your entry
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This is really a great message...
and I LOVE the unique way you penned it!
Best wishes in the contest...life, and always!!!
Write on and on!
You have a wonderful attitude...you know your worth!!!
Wish everyone could understand that they belong here...
there is a purpose for us all...
Thanks for sharing...
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