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Comes a Time

Life has a sent
A glow
A sudden pleasant emotion
To be lost
or found
Either way to live
I pray
To secure hope
I wish
To prosper
In the end
Depression does follow
Though
I'm blinded
By love
Hope
Faith
Blessed lord
If I did feel so low
I would plead
To receive forgiveness
From our saviour
Life reborn
As he died
For our lives
I forgive others
For their evil acts
Played on me
A twinkle glare
A forceful push
A violent word
Because if I didn't
It would dwell
Make me numb
To sink back to before
Wrapped in depression blanket
Love your life
There comes a time
You're the only one that can
Eventually
That blanket loosens
Each day
To once again
You can spot
Life's glow


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  • thelordreigns gold member
    July 12

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    Thank you for this poem of hope. I, too, know what it is like to be "wrapped in depression blanket" with little hope of unraveling the complexities of life. But little by little, God does make it better if you just stay and hope.

    Well expressed. You touched my heart.

    - jo -


  • MoonsShadow gold member
    July 11

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    Healing within ones soul is to be the best way to have a life that you can enjoy,life is to short not to be able too..
    thank you for sharing
    goodluck


  • Desire gold member
    July 11

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Comes a Time
    This piece tugged hard at my Spirit, I read Your words several times and I Love the first exhale of breath when You penned this piece...Wanted to toss this just for review, just to be sure I am headed in the correct direction- re: Life has a sent- did You mean scent?
    and re: Depression does fallow- did You mean follow? The only other word that I keep getting nudged re: capitalizing is lord- Lord but other than that Your words Touch deep and one could feel Your Life's glow- I'm Blessed You are here
    Excellent Voice to Inspire
    Powerful images You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • XPandyxFangirlX
    July 11

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    Spelling:
    line 6 is either
    line 7 is pray
    line 12 is follow
    line 22 is saviour
    line 25 is lives
    line 27 is their
    line 39 is you're
    line 45 (last line) is life's

    So that's the spelling. But I would suggest making the lines a bit longer, but you have your own style and you don't have to change it.
    And the metaphor for blanket and depression are perfect for eachother. Nice job. Giood luck in the contest.
    ~Pandy

    • hollowriver
      July 13
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      oh thank you for taking the time to point them all out...i am a horrible speller...at least I try

  • Sandra R Reynolds silver member
    July 11
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    Great qrite to keep on going.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    July 11

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    Excellent write here and oh so true

    I truly belive that if you concentrate on the needs you so want within and apply those needs to yourself and heal yourself then you shall also heal all around you those who also cry out to you . You can love yourself and take care of the body given to you by Christ for he gave his life so you can live .Lets start today find what makes you happy and take one step at a time but never stop until you ahve found this love and happiness your body so needs to be free


  • Roaddog Wolf gold member
    July 8

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    a well written message and like the metaphors used to describe the feelings, thanks for sharing
    good luck in the contest


  • solo wisp gold member
    July 8

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    depression and blanket fit very well together ... Your thoughts are beautiful and well taken.


  • Woodchuck4400 silver member
    July 8

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    This is a nice dedication to our Lord, Jesus Christ. It was an enjoyable read. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Talking Toni gold member
    July 8

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    Very Nice....

    words of wisdom spoken here. You are very encouraging to thse who wou be surrounded by depression, darkness, death, hate. Ceaving to your encouraging words could move mountains for some of those crying out for help. An most do cry out for help fo a long time witout many noticing. Thanks for your encouaing word of wisdom here and reaching for the light of Jesus is the healing balm we all need for every situation of our life He is the answer!!!Thanks for sharing!!!~~Toni~~


  • Arkbear gold member
    July 7

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    Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts with us......I enjoyed your write ~

     

    I hope you get a chance to look over some of your grammatical errors ~

     

    To once again spot lifes glow.....that's precious ~

     

    God bless,

     

    Bear ~

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